At the same time Raphael entered the town of Nibilia, Zeke, who we have just witnessed defeat four men, left the market from where he had finished. He returned home to retrieve his blade. It was a fine blade, made of the finest steel, and it was sturdy. his sword was a saber. The handle was crafted to fit his hands. It made Zeke feel secure and safe. 1
Suddenly, Zeke heard shrieks from don the road. Rushing downstairs he saw a hooded figure, dressed in black, lift up a man with what seemed to be air, and pop his head off. The man was flung into a stand on the side of the road, and Zeke decided that this was enough. He hurried to the position of the man and drew his saber. Knowing that rushing into a battle is not the beat idea, he walked in slowly.2
"You," he said as he drew closer to the mage.3
"Yes, you indeed," he replied, not seeming to care about Zeke.4
The man picked up another man5
"Drop him or die," said Zeke readying his stance into a guard position. 6
"I wouldn't that if I were you."7
"Hmph, what is your name?"8
"Raphael, and you are?"9
"Ezekial Tatarraan"10
"Good, now I know how to address you as I kill you."11
"Same to you."12
Raphael picked up a pole from the stand that he had previously broken, and swung it around him until he was in a ready position. Zeke brought up his sword, and waited for the attack. A few minutes went by and neither of them moved.13
"After you," said Zeke.14
"Fine."15
Raphael ran forward spinning the pole. He brought it down on Zeke. Zeke spun to the right and swung his sword out, catching Raphael in the left side. Some blood trickled down his side, but the wound was not deep. Raphael swung the pole back as Zeke's back was to him, and caught him in the back around the third rib. Zeke stumbled forward a little. Both spun and Zeke came down on Raphael. the pole came up and caught the sword and broke at the end. The pole was now the same length as the saber, but it would be sufficient. 16
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Comments
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Oh Damn! I Can't Wait To Read The Next One!!! Oh My God Is This Exciting! Oh My God Was This Good, I Am Goin To The Next! Great Write Hun!
:~: Kate :~:
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yeah they should be. I was mad because my computer wouldnt copy paste it onto here so I had to re-type it.
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awesome
hey hey hey this is really good too! agian you can picture what is happening, that is really good for a story, this is really good i like the part where he is like, after you...ha yeah zeke is awesome! well anyway um i think you were typing kinda fast cus you messed up in some parts, like in the second paragraph,'from don the road' should that be don or down? 'not the beat idea,' should beat be best?..'The man picke dup another man' ,picked up, right? ok well i'm done, just thought you should check those so people wont wonder! ;P luv always,
~*Katie*~
~*TORR*~

