Guardians Awakening

"Chhhh, chhhh, chhhh." A blue blast lit up a ruined temple. Grass fried and the stones were scorched and had streaks of black. A thump and a girl stagger around the large body of a Stone Giant.

Panting she slumped onto her tall white staff, utterly exhausted. Leaning down she pocked a red stone that had rolled out of the Stone Giant's pocket.

The silent temple ground was ruined when a tall boy jumped down off of a pillar.

"Aarita, man, you really ruined the grass!!" All that was his response was a glare from Aarita.

"Thad, I am not in the mood to be scolded right now. I am worn to the bone and your chattering isn't HELPING!!" Thad chuckled.

"Chill, chill. You defeated it without my help and now you’re yelling at me. Who was the one who wanted to take him on by her self? If I remember correctly.." He was interrupted by a rock thrown at him, ducking he grinned.

Aarita had sat on the ground and scolded ever more fiercely at him. Shoving the annoying, evil piece of brown hair out of her eyes. Always when she was most serious it popped up and totally screwed the moment up, like now.

"Thad..." She began warningly. That raised another chuckle from Thad. Leaning down he dropped three ripe apples in front of Aarita.

"Ary calm it." He replied, using her nickname to stop her. Aarita bit into one of the apples. Clear juice running down her chin and on her neck.

"We are done right? We can see Limey and the other?" Her hopeful eyes made him smile. Done, they had finished one of their long quests and could return to their friends. This quest was going after the Three Scared Ones. Seven of them had split up into groups of two and one of three and went off. Each of them given a scared One to find.

Thad and Aarita's was twelve stones, all of the colors of the rainbow. Aarita was impatient to get back to her friends, Limey, Kat, Hammon, Arc, and Tyine.

Aarita being a cleric had received a message from the two other mages saying that all of the other Sacred Ones had been collected. And to meet there.

"We. Are. Done." He grinned as she screamed in excitement.

"Wooaaahhh, calm it. We will meet them AFTER you heal yourself." Pouting Aarita grimaced.

"I’m out of magic right now. I can't heal now." She muttered. Turning her face away she sighed and hung her head. For a cleric to not have enough power or magic to heal was...not good. Thad leaned on a fallen pillar and threw bandages at her.

Grabbing them out of the air she bandaged long scrapes on her arm and leg that was bleeding.

"LETS GO!!" She said, jumping up and down.

"I'm healed, or patched up so I can make it there, oh PLEASE Thad its been two whole YEARS after I have last seen Limey and the others!!" Even though Thad knew he shouldn't, he nodded.

Another scream of excitement left Aarita's mouth. Clamping her hands on her mouth still didn't lessen her smile.

"Girls,” muttered Thad," Always yelling and screaming." This time Aarita hit him with her staff.

Off the two went, through the thick woods and leaving the burnt, old temple with the fallen Stone Giant behind them. Off to see Limey and everyone else.

I bet I spelled things wrong and you are all like "What?" But stay with me!

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  • perfect paradox
    August 2, 2007
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    SPELLING IS CORRECTED!

    My spelling is now corrected, I am so sorry that you had to read that with the crappy spelling.


  • karmaxandxcrayons
    May 26, 2007

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    ....

    Lee-san. GAWED. FIX 'YO SPELLING!!! I CAN'T UNDERSTAND ANY OF IT!!! YEESH. UDDA-wise.... good!!!
    there were some weird parts in the dialogue. look over it again please.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 5.


  • My-Name-Is-Nobody
    May 9, 2007

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    Seriously I agree with Alimorna, you don't give yourself enough credit. You got some real potential here. Your better than me hon. anyway, polease keep going with this one, cause I really like it a lot.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Alimorna
    April 12, 2007
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    I love it! You don't give yourself enough credit - you're really good!^_^


  • DarkDayMagic
    April 3, 2007
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    There are a couple spelling mistakes but don't let 'em worry you. I'm not sure if this is carrying on from a longer story or if it's meant to stand on it's own. I, personally would have liked a bit more background but it wasn't absolutely necessary. The story moved along nicely. Good work.


    • perfect paradox
      April 17, 2007
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      thanks I sorta based it on a game and my friends on the game, Im not that good at doing background history


  • stars girl
    April 1, 2007
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    AWESOME!!!!!!!!!


  • Holey Pastry
    March 29, 2007

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    nice

    This is going to be an interesting plot, to say the least. Yeah. there are some spelling mistakes, but not very big ones. Also, check on some puncuations.... otherwise, kudos!

    • perfect paradox
      March 30, 2007
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      xD I know, Im typing on my dad's laptop in Italy and its, interesting. If I find any spelling I will try to spell it right.

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