SURRENDER 1
Tonight’s tryst has me trembling in anticipation. I carefully prepare because things rarely go as I plan. I shower, shave, and dress for our dinner date. Sweaty palms make driving difficult. My anxieties ride along on the route to her apartment. With a deep breath to calm me, I knock, hoping everything will be perfect.2
She greets me at the door, dressed in a low cut, tight fitting, black dress. The clingy fabric outlines a sensuous, supple body. Her sultry lips touch my cheek as she grabs my hand and pulls me to the door. “Let’s go”, she says. I just nod my head and stare at her. I’m lost in her beauty. I’m caught in an erotic dream. The horn blows away my vapor vision. Startled, I walk quickly to the car.3
We drive to this quaint little seafood restaurant on the bay. Our polite conversation is only interrupted by her giggle and suggestive smile. Using her well manicured index finger, she traces along the seam down my inner thigh. My hand drops instantly on reflex and I grasp hers in mine, stopping this slow torture. The remainder of the evening is spent in silent satisfaction of knowing that there’s more to come at a later time.4
Our meal of fish and wine arrives as we watch the pleasure boats sail on the glassy waters. Conversation gives way to forks and knives.The need for words escape us as we lose ourselves in one another eyes. A chilled red wine warms my throat as a passion fire heats me down below. I can only sit and stare into her eyes. Then her eyes invite me to take her home.5
I gathered my thoughts, paid the tab, and walked to the car. I can’t remember if my feet ever touched the ground. She sat close to me on the way back. Her hands rested gently in my lap. I could smell the freshness in her hair and feel her hot breath on my neck. The last few miles were very uncomfortable as my body began to swell all over. Finally we made it and desperately raced each other to the door.6
With the doors locked safely behind us, we kissed. A soft and gentle touch of lips became a passion duel. We kissed with parted lips. My tongue slid between her teeth and she accepted me with a low, soft moan. She drew me closer. She wanted to feel my hardened body next to hers. Her body yielded to my touch, completely, as we embraced. I could feel the heat rising from her soul, condensing on her lips. Hungrily I drank the salty liquid in.7
She led me to the bedroom. We began to doff the clothes that were now soaking wet. Her flesh was hot as embers sparking fires within my chest. We joined in total harmony. She rode the rhythm of my body. Feverishly she met my every thrust with her own. Our love throes ended in a mighty shudder and collapse. Both of us exhausted lay motionless in each other’s arms. 8
Such sweet surrender 9
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Hot story..Great write....Thank you for entering my contest....
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excellent write..extremely HOT, sensuous, pro
beginning: 5, language: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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excellent
What a way to put to words of a man's emotions of thunder & lighting going off in ones body & soul. Each line delivers the emotions felt by all of us at one time or another, & I applaud this poem as true fact. Very, very, well done. -
don't like this one.
I'm a little jealous of this one, my friend. Because that woman you write about is not me. Since I don't own a black dress; I do however have a dk green velvet one though. -
sigh........
Edited on May 25, 8:32 p.m. because ''. -
This was a interesting write since I get to see it all from the mans perspective. The dining, drinks, and enviroment are all desribed effortlessly, making one feel that they are there. And in a way they are. The only thing I felt was a bit of disappointment with the car ride home, any woman that caught up in desire? Would have been teasing and torturing someone. Trust me I know (Evil Grin). Beautiful write Leo, Catressa
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i must say, although this was written as erotica, it ws done with much class and style. thestory leading up, was very well done. i know this can be taken so many diffrent directions, and i think you have one hell of a start to a great story here. Keep the great work that I know you can do, up!
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Excellent!
Yes, I read and commented on this on June 4th. I remember it created quite a stir! -
This was wonderfully written for a first attempt Leo. I am very impressed. Thank you for inviting me to read it. It was my ummm...pleasure.
You did a very fine job my friend. 
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Fantastic!
Wow! This is very sensual without being crude. You are a talented writer. Thanks for sharing your gift. -
Next time bring the wine and a picnic of cheese and crackers, forget about the restaurant...and the nights festivities will begin much sooner. LOL
Very nice piece of sensual writing.
Well done.
Mary ann -
Very passionate person
I enjoyed reading this very much. You feel like your right there experiencing it all. It leaves you thinking, "Ok where is he?" lol. Ty. -
Very pleasant read! I liked how subtle you kept this story. The sensuality is there, the imagery and the feelings, all very well described. An erotic poem doesn't need always be very explicit to be good, and here we see why.
Mari
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Good piece
Very descriptive. I enjoyed this very much but as I am an erotica buff I would have loved to have heard more details -
Hmmmm, Leo.....you forgot the touching of the feet under the table. Slidding the legs up her thigh....her toes riding up yours....YOU know? (yes, you know) Lovely write. What a wonderful fantasy...or is it? I love to see how you are spreading yourself out. Cheryl
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Just wonderful, I wouldn`t change a thing. Red white doesn`t matter I was enjoying the date as if I was the other women. Thanks we should do this again.lol..Beautiful as always..thanks for sharing with us all..xo
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OOhhhh la la....this was hot, sticky, and sweet. Very steamy....
Kinda made me woo hoo if you know what I mean. You have to write some more...
Great Job Sweets
Chrissy
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Very very sensual. Really, I loved every description. You have the gift of making the reader ecstatic with them. I love your poems and liked this short story too.
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Well done my friend, well done. I could see it all as I read it. What a vision, what a dream, what a lovely evening. ....... well done. Only one thing I would change, .............. OK two, one is I would be the woman..... lol. The second is white wine with fish dear, I do believe....lol. sexy write dear.
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