Drop on My Heart a Rose

DROP ON MY HEART A ROSE

by Robert Davidson

My voice breaks against those lips of thine,
Before I leave for war I must implore
Let me love you gently your first time
As dumb-tongued my love to you expose.
And then I'll return to thee once more
To bring to thy heart a rose.

I long to merge myself in you
And lie with you all my last long night
Making each to the other fit true;
While love's deep wonder to you shows
Heady passion given for your delight.
I leave with your heart a rose.

You laugh as in my fond arms you fall
As you respond with your passion pent.
But before I answer the bugle's call
I want us to lie entwined in still repose
As in mad delight sublimely spent
You press to my heart a rose.

As the war rages on I see you yet
Mourning red-eyed your lost love. I cry aloud
'If I die, I know you'll not forget
For on our troth one request I must impose:
If I am swathed in the silence of a shroud,
Then drop on my heart a rose.'

Copyright 2005
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  • werner1221
    March 5, 2008

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    oh, very beautiful.
    nice touch.

    favorite line:
    My voice breaks against those lips of thine,
    Before I leave for war I must implore
    Let me love you gently your first time

    gj


  • lovableReese
    October 26, 2007
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    it is good. like it

  • xxbri
    August 22, 2007

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    WOW!

    really, really, amazing!
    I don't really read poems much, but I would rate this top on my poem list. Your words flowed nicely, amazingly, I felt each word. keep it up! (:


  • MyZeroForever
    August 22, 2007
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    Exactly what I'm looking for
    Good luck.


  • plurangel silver member
    August 20, 2007

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    wow! and aww! very beautiful words. I loved the imagery your proposed and clearly you painted the picture of making love. you used erotica without it being foul. congrats to that. goodluck in my contest


  • Frozen Angel
    August 18, 2007

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    This is a very descriptive and touching yet sad poem all at the same time. I love that kind of writing. Thanks for entering my contest!

    *Frozen Angel*


  • Asfand
    June 30, 2007

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    omg.....its so sad dude............i really liekd it...............its touching!!! it was very beautiful!!! loved it!!!

    great job!!!

    cheers and gud luk!!!!!


  • jtnbuck
    May 17, 2007
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    oh wow i loved this good job I felt the emtion coming from this it was so sweet great job god bless you and good luck in my contest


  • sodancewithsoda silver member
    April 26, 2007
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    This is just so sweet and beautiful... and omg.. it made me swoon I hate how war DOES tear people apart, but then again, most people WOULD fight for the ones they love. This is such a beautiful work of art, and I HAVE to applaude this ^_^

    Thanks for sharing this with us

  • jtnbuck
    April 20, 2007

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    this was wonderful and sooo sad great write tho you have a intewresting way of writeing and i love it good job on this amazing write i am looking forward to reading more by you i liked this alot well done


  • SageSyren Greeters member
    March 26, 2007

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    This was beautiful and so sad. Image having love and then go off to war where you might not come back. The heartache and worry on both sides. This was wonderful.
    ~*Brooke*~

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