"BUT I LOVE YOU!!!" He yelled and as I took a step forward, he pulled the trigger. Blood splattered my face as I stood, unmoving, unwilling to live.
---One Year Later---
"Jane, honey. We are leaving for Uruguay. See you in a month, dear. Ta-Ta!" Mom yelled leaving with Dad for the airport.
They always left me alone during this time of year. The time when he died. Correction. The time when he killed himself. The door to my room opened and closed and I figured it was Mom wanting to give me a hug goodbye. I didn't touch anyone. I hated contact after him. I turned to tell her not to touch me when I felt a cool breeze on my face. I sat up and turned around finding him. Only, he was transparant. Then, he disappeared. I grabbed my jacket and ran to his grave site. He was sitting on his grave, completely flesh and blood, only the blood was dripping from a hole that had caused his death.
"Why are you here?" I asked.
"To bring you with me. I couldn't stop myself from loving you even though I stopped myself from living. Please join me." He said hold out a hand.
I grabbed his hand smiling as he lead me to the street. A truck was too close to me to stop and I smiled at the driver, knowing this was the end. I was hit and flew quite a few feet away. My chest caved in from the impact and the entire right side of my face and body, the skin was peeled off from the pavment. I felt my heart slow down and then it was black. When my eyes opened I was standing above my body while people surrounded it. I backed away and turned to find him. Only he was different. He changed into a small goblin, with green wings.
"You fool. You will be His Evil Lordship for all eternity now, as with your stupid boyfriend." He cackled. "Humans. So easy to trick."
A hole of fire appeared below my feet and I fell into oblivion to serve the sentence for suicide. But, he was there. And he's all I've ever wanted. Death is so sweet, like love.
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thnx for entering the contest.
okay wow this was really good. i loved it. i agree with Totem on the beginning part. it does seem the main character is being shot. but other than that this was a really good story.
good luck and keep up the amazing work.
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it was good, i havent read them all yet but i like this one.
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wow, that was pretty cool, linking with the religion side of life and love, i liked it, nice ending to
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You might want to make the beginning paragraph a little clearer it makes the reader feel as if the main character is shot.
at times the story feels a little rushed. interesting concept. Good luck in the contest. -
This was a very interesting story full of nice details and emotions. I don't agree with suicide making one burn in hell, but I like how you ended this...with her being happy to be with him even in hell. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck!
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