She stared at herself in the mirror. Her eyes began to water. She hated looking at herself. She walked to her desk, unaware of her actions.
A pair of scissors were on top. Her hands grabbed them, her legs brought her back to her reflection. The scissors winked at her. They were her best friend now. She raised them to her hair. Brown locks fell to the floor along with many salty droplets. She could still hear the teasing from the others. She would show them.
Her pale gray eyes darted from herself to the scissors. The steel longed to taste blood. Her tongue slid across the metal, slightly cutting itself. It would do.
She reached out towards herself. Her other hand followed and then began it's journey back creating a passageway across the length of her arm. Crimson water escaped from it's prison cell. Her eyes focused once again on herself as the tool was moved into the other hand. She followed the same procedure and sat down to watch her life source flow from her, this was pain she could take.
She looked once again at her reflection, a girl not herself looked up at her from a crimson sea, she seemed lost. She would find her way home today. A soft smile escaped, her eyes closed forever.
Author notes
More boredom... >.>;
A contest entry
- realistic by LostSoulOfRage.
199 points, ended April 20, 2007, 16 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Under 200 words by QueenWolf.
140 points, ended May 22, 2007, 49 entries
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I don't find it realistic.. Also it didn't grab my attention. It seems too repeditive. good luck with contests.
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Geeze Krysa, are you obsessed with killing lol. Interesting short, you could go back and add her recalling thoughts that drove her this far. If you wanted. -
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lol, urm... Killing people in writing is like uber fun
and i guess i could do that sometime... 
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tnx for entering and im srry for the late comment, it was my computer.
anyways i loved this peice. its very good. you have some very deep and amazing lines in this. it was very well written.
good luck and keep up the amazing work.
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It's ok, computers can be evil sometimes -.- and thanks ^_^
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Whoa
'Crimson water escaped from it's prison cell.'
I love that line 0.0
And, whoa, the ending gave me one hell of a shudder. I didn't quite know what to expect, but damn.. Not that. yup. I think this is one of your best that I have read so far. Congrats on a great short!
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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You're most welcome
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Awwww! How sad! I like it! -
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awww... really?
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