As he watched the rivulets of blood pool underneath her asshole, he felt his dick straining harder against his pants. He longed to satisfy the urge that was building inside him. She cringed weakly in revulsion as she saw him begin to undo his pants. His shriveled, oddly-shaped member disgusted her even more. She had a difficult time focusing on it while she struggled to keep her eyes open. 1
He held the knife in his left hand and his dick in his right. He gave it a few strokes as he slowly inched the knife up her thigh. She jumped, tried to close her legs before he had a chance to react. It was too late. Before she could stop him, he sat down with his knees on her thighs, jamming the knife in her right thigh with his weight. She yelped and twitched. As he pulled the knife free, the blood poured out of the wound and onto his leg. It was hot and sticky. He gave his dick a few more strokes. 2
Millions of thoughts passed faintly through her mind. Her grasp of reality was teetering, at best. The pain made it hard to grasp a clear idea, but her emotions were easier to discern. She felt fear-- fear of death, fear of pain, fear of the unknown. These emotions mixed with her pain were causing a sensory-overload in her brain; she was becoming colder. She kept her eyes on the hand holding the knife. His dick, she kept in her ever-failing peripheral; it didn't pose as much of a threat.3
As he watched the blood pour down into her crotch, he pictured her beautiful mouth formed into an "O," screaming. As he leaned over to untie the cloth around her mouth, she felt his hairy, moist balls on her stomach. She moved her head away from his outstretched hand, sickened by the smell of his cock still on his fingers. He grabbed her head roughly and pulled it upwards. Lodging the knife under the cloth, he cut upwards to free it.4
"You're a sick fuck," she moaned.5
He smiled at this. Unfortunately, there was one drawback to ungagging her. Now he would have to listen to her bitch. Just like every other woman. He leaned back on his heels again, cock sticking straight out and left unattended. He let himself savor this next move, as he knew it would all be over soon. The human body can only endure so much injury, and this last wound would very likely prove fatal. 6
He repositioned the knife in his right hand and moved it up her left thigh. For all symmetrical purposes, he stabbed a hole in her left thigh and laughed as she shrieked. His dick twitched as he moved the knife to rest on the hairy mouth of her dark cavern. Her eyes widened. He began half cutting, half tugging out the small hairs out of her pelvic playground. She rolled back and forth, still attempting to escape the inevitable. He began venturing further south into the yielding, pink flesh of her labia.7
As soon as she felt the knife on her most precious, sensitive skin she cried out, "No, no, no, no...."8
With two very quick and concise movements, he cut very small vertical incisions between the inner and outer labia. This was more for pain, less for practicality. He left all of the tissue intact. He braced himself more firmly atop her and returned the knife to his left hand before grabbing his cock again in his right. He slowly pushed the head into her tiny hole, feeling the blood drip all around him and inside of her as she moved back and forth. As she spasmed and screamed, her vaginal muscles squeezed tightly against his dick, sending waves of pleasure all through his body.9
Even more slowly still, he pulled out and looked down to see her inner labia pulled taut against his exiting head. She screamed again as the movement slowly opened the small slits up wider. Suddenly, he had an idea. While still inside of her, he switched the knife back over to his right and grabbed her clit with the left. He tugged it down, being very careful not to let it roll in his grasp. He needed it to be very still for this. She closed her eyes and whimpered. He positioned his index finger against the back of the blade and with a downward slice, cut a very precise line down the middle of her clitoral hood. This, in turn, exposed the uncovered nerve bundle that attached to her clitoris. 10
He returned the knife to his left hand and leaned forward, propping himself up with his right hand on her chest. This bent his dick at an upward angle, rubbing it against her now-exposed clit. As he pulled in and out of her, he felt each spasm rack her body as she screamed, her muscles squeezing ever more tightly on his dick. She started twitching and convulsing. Each wave that passed over her brought him closer and closer to climax. 11
He reached up to fumble with her mangled breast. As he stuck his finger into the warm, moist mammary tissue, he could almost imagine what it would be like to fuck her tit. He was getting so close, he would need to pull out soon if he wanted to try it. Her eyes were glazing over, and she didn't seem to be registering any changes in sensation. As he positioned his knees on either side of her chest, there was a small flicker of fear across her eyes.12
He very slowly and carefully pushed himself into the large mound of mammary tissue. It was very soft and warm. He could feel her heart beating very faintly and slowly in her chest. As he withdrew, he looked down into the hole he had just created, saw it filling with blood and clear fluid. He pushed into it again, building up speed as he rammed her breastbone. He grabbed the breast roughly in both hands and pulled it tighter against his shaft. He rammed faster and faster until he felt the power of his climax drain all of the energy out of him. 13
He sat there for a few moments until he realized she was starting to get cold. He got disgusted and sat up. He didn't have any use for a dead whore. 14
Author notes
I was really having more fun with this than anything. I'm half awake and feeling a bit on the creative side. i figured it was about time to end this thing.
In a list
A contest entry
- Gore, gore and blood galore. by MalevolentDesire.
450 points, ended May 1, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Believable?
Comments
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Wow, great ending. wonder if there's going to be anymore with this guy and what will happen to him. Hope there's more with him. really enjoyed this story.
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I love this Andy was right he said I would love your Captor sereis and he was right. I'm with Blair you got o wirte more erotica
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Well, all I can say is wow. This is certainly very interesting, very morbid and very much the sort of thing I'm looking for in this contest.
Your descriptive language and use of terms was very good, and you drew me into the story with everything that you said.
Although I can't testify as to how this would feel, as I don't have the same body parts, I can imagine that this sort of mutilation wouldn't be very enjoyable for the female.
I liked this entry a lot, and found it not so much arousing, as... I don't really know what. But, it was great.
Thank you for your entry, and good luck.
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That wasn't so funny!
Well...have to say you wrote this well...(but why?!)Good command of the language...and certainly not too flowery! But, I'll tell you Purple, I wouldn't want to be a character in one of your stories! (lol!)
Nice flow (no pun, please) though...consistent pace. But Jeez! Fun?
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THIS WAS SICK.... HOT.. AND SOOOO MY TYPE OF ERTOICA... sux u didnt ssee my profile oage back in september... I hope u wirte more of this erotica
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WOW!
THIS MIGHT MAKE ME A SICK INDIVIDUAL, BUT I FOUND GREAT PLEASURE IN THIS! This was really well written and could actually be a sexual turn on to some people
*Shifty eye's*
*looks away*
*whistles*
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Sad, really...
I found that this had a very sad ending, you know...even though I knew it was going to happen this way. I hope that some girl gets a hold of him and mistreats him like he did her. Poor girl. -
Hahaha...wow...a very powerful ending to a very twisted story. Bravo, my dear! Bravo! I'm interested to know how the poo you came up with such...erm...vivid descriptions. I mean...dear lo'd...is fucking a tit even possible? *shakes head* Anyway, good job. That last line made me laugh.
"He didn't have any use for a dead whore."
Perfect.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Possible ideas.
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It seemed to be complete.
It was a little abrupt an ending, but it works. There was so much description while she was being butchered and raped that I felt it wouldn't hurt if you had described his disgust and disappointment of her dying on him too quickly in more detail. Was she a whore, or did he just regard all or certain women as whores. I think it would be better if you made her an innocent. I would suggest explaining how she got into the situation and building her character a little more.
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FREAKIN WOW!! Soooo great, dang you beat me with the morbidness, I'm going to have to improve my sadistic writings lol. Wonderful job, you deserve this applause.
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Holy $#!%
I am literally shaking...im having a hard time typing this. The way he mangled her, that made ME hurt. *shudder* My heart is going a mile a minute right now and i cannot catch my breath. This was so...so lifelike. Damn...all three parts of this were good. I applaud your...morbid sense of writing and torture...im speechless (though it may not seem like it what i put up above
). This doesnt need any changes or anything. Wonderful...i needed the shit scared out of me. Thanks
LJ
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Honestly..I can't say I've hated something more..I really can't..it was disgusting and made me cringe way too much and it brings out my worst fears..
Which brings me to this note..I hate life..because this was so real. You always hear those stories of girls getting raped and such..absolutly mortifying as was this..You wonder why people would do such a thing, but it happens constantly and it's amazing how well you grasped this concept..
Yes, I hated it..but I also loved it because every detail was so cold and disturbing and if your writing this kind of story, you need that and you did so well with it..I just can't stand reading such gruesome detail..but I did
(Sorry, I'm a chicken shit lol)
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