I am an igloo
with the door padlocked shut
with the ice frozen hard
and no windows to climb through
I am an igloo
with six locks on the entrance
with a gun in the corner
with a burglar alarm
I am an igloo
With a paranoid owner
In a bad part of the tundra
Where crack igloos abound
I am an igloo
with a psycho outside
aiming his hairdryer
on ‘high’ at the ice
Author notes
Woo! Poetry! ...Even though this is a story website, I'm posting it anyway, because...I am. And it's for a contest. So HAH!
In a list
A contest entry
- Give it to me A good old poem...lol by jtnbuck.
200 points, ended May 17, 2007, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Write me a Poem by Embitter.
245 points, ended May 25, 2007, 12 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - don't you love this type of contest? by ohemeegeeay.
475 points, ended August 13, 2007, 17 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I liked this poem. Sort of. And the 'sort of' isn't a reflection on your skill. With poems, 'sort of' liking it pretty much as far as you'll get. So well done.
There were no grammar or spelling mistakes as far as I could see, and it was very original. I can't quite fault it, apart from on the fact that it's poetry, haha.
Thanks for entering, good luck! -
lol..i liked this poem..for some reason it made me laugh. especially the part about the physco with the hair dryer..haha good job
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You certainly get points for originality, so you've got that going for ya.
Also I'm crazy, that also gives you points.
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see my first comment good job tho
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Oh crap! Sorry! I completely forgot to check my reviews to make sure you didn't read it already!
I know how annoying that can be. Sorry!
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I like this a lot. Especially since this is the first poem I've read that had igloos being likened to the writer
this had nice visions.. nice imageries.. and yeah, sometimes, we do feel caged.. and just.. ready to explode. I got that in this poem ^_^ I hope I understood it well
Thanks for sharing thsi
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very good i liked this good job and good luck in my contest good job and god bless!!!
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Wow
Hey...I'm in here too, you psycho...if the ice starts to melt we'll both die! I think the last verse was my favorite. I liked the others too, but there's always something about a psycho.
Wow. I really got into this poem. Great work with this. -
Well, it definitely goes beyond the usual XD Eskimoes have bad neighbourhoods too, do they? I had to laugh very, very hard at the last verse, even as I wondered where one would plug a hairdryer out on the tundra. Maybe it's battery operated. But seriously, hairdrying your way through an igloo? Genius.
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pretty good
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