I don’t know what is going on.
I am doomed to confusion.
I think about you and I want to cry.
But I don’t and tears never fully reach my eyes.
You ask
‘but we’re okay now?’
And I’m not sure what you mean
I am never okay
I am confused
I am depressed
I am lonely
I am anything
But
Okay
You asked me
That day
Why I wanted you to hit me
I think
I am looking for someone to tell me
That I deserve to be abused
Every time I think about you
I want to cry
Author notes
maybe not what you're looking for in this contest but oh well
A contest entry
- Write a story using exactly 100 words! by Jinxgirl.
155 points, ended March 17, 2007, 43 entries
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Sad, depressing and well done.
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Whoa, this was depressing. But it is interesting, and I wonder why the protagonist would be want to hit, why they feel they deserve it? Very provoking to thought here.
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Awwwwww, how sad. I like this peom, it is a good one. Very good job on this, I enjoyed readin it ^.^
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Very emotional - I like this.
And the comments are right - you don't deserve to be abused. No one does.
Thanks for sharing,
GoNE
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this is beautiful cassie.
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no, this is very well done... you have conveyed the pain and confusion of the person very well. there are many people like this unfortunately.
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A good poem, again!
You write these poems very well, but also sad and emotional...
And real? I fear...
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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hun, i cant say i know what your going though, And NO you dont deserve to be abused! your a wonderful person! And anyone that does abuse you is an ass that need the shit beat out of them.. Im sorry ive put you though this.. i really am.. please dont cry i dont want you to cry becasue of me...
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