SARAH GOODENOUGH
By Robert Davidson
Sarah Goodenough was an erotic blonde, rather wide-eyed and very pink– skinned, who presented love in its most obese aspect, as her long honey-coloured hair fell liquid gold.
Not the most romantic of love-nests, she thought to herself, as she lay exposed upon a heap of hessian in the shed, alongside a pot of maidenhair and several garden tools; while outside was the sound of a magpie's desperate cry.
She felt the pressure of Joe’s body against her own, her blunt fingers touching, stroking, pleasing him; while he tried out her buttocks with a calloused hand. You enjoyed Sarah like a warm bath, he always thought, the strong grip of her solid thighs.
Joe Duffield had always wanted the fast lane, multiple partners, she knew only too well, exciting embraces in secluded corners, the sudden moment of quick passion in the dark. Distrusting the snares of sentiment Joe feared women were just waiting to trap him with tender love-talk.
But at least Joe had made her feel she was a woman, Sarah realized, whereas many other men had given her the go-by; her immense size no doubt!
Later, after the love-making, Sarah had sat with her legs apart, plumply exposed, in the shed dusted with late afternoon light. Cold eyes burn the deepest, she thought sadly, as she felt Joe’s eyes penetrate her glitter of golden vaginal hair.
Declare her secret love, she asked herself? Not likely! She was biting her hand against bitter tears, knowing it was just the way life got hold of you. Outside in the garden a thrush sang sweetly. But, no - she knew she could never speak her silent love!
Copyright 2007
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Sounds like Adam and Eve in Paradise.
So many birds singing in the story. Maybe one of them will fly by Joe and tell him the secret about Sarah. They both have things they need from each other. I believe these two will make it just fine. Love is love whether the other one knows about it or not.
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Good job! I can't believe you had a prewrite so incredibly fitting for this contest!
Tacobell hit on the biggest problem, with the handfull of run-on sentences, but while it would be nice if it were remedied, they aren't unforgivable. The way it peeks into both of their heads without a transition is sort of sloppy/confusing, too.
I really like the way you juxtaposed her feelings with really romantic imagery at the end.
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That was really good. Sad, but great.
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I loved this story. It was so sad, but such a great write.
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This was great. I loved the way you wrote this! This held my attention and it was easy to follow. The only problem I had was I felt that the sentances ran on sometimes. I think it worked alright in this story though. good job!... Thancks for entering and good luck in the contest.
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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This was very good, I'm suprised you havent gotten many comments on it.
I enjoyed reading it quite a bit, actually.
The plot was great...it was short though.
Excellent job
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good job this was good
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