SARAH GOODENOUGH
By Robert Davidson
Sarah Goodenough was an erotic blonde, rather wide-eyed and very pink– skinned, who presented love in its most obese aspect, as her long honey-coloured hair fell liquid gold.
Not the most romantic of love-nests, she thought to herself, as she lay exposed upon a heap of hessian in the shed, alongside a pot of maidenhair and several garden tools; while outside was the sound of a magpie's desperate cry.
She felt the pressure of Joe’s body against her own, her blunt fingers touching, stroking, pleasing him; while he tried out her buttocks with a calloused hand. You enjoyed Sarah like a warm bath, he always thought, the strong grip of her solid thighs.
Joe Duffield had always wanted the fast lane, multiple partners, she knew only too well, exciting embraces in secluded corners, the sudden moment of quick passion in the dark. Distrusting the snares of sentiment Joe feared women were just waiting to trap him with tender love-talk.
But at least Joe had made her feel she was a woman, Sarah realized, whereas many other men had given her the go-by; her immense size no doubt!
Later, after the love-making, Sarah had sat with her legs apart, plumply exposed, in the shed dusted with late afternoon light. Cold eyes burn the deepest, she thought sadly, as she felt Joe’s eyes penetrate her glitter of golden vaginal hair.
Declare her secret love, she asked herself? Not likely! She was biting her hand against bitter tears, knowing it was just the way life got hold of you. Outside in the garden a thrush sang sweetly. But, no - she knew she could never speak her silent love!
Copyright 2007
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It was sad!!! I think it was well written!!! I LOVED the feeling in this story nicely done


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darn
This was pretty sad. I sadly didn't like it too much, I think it's not cause it's bad or anything, but just cause it's not the kind of thing I like.
beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 3.
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Your description is well done, however I find some of the phrasing a little awkward. The flow of the story gets interrupted with this on occasion.
I like the overall concept of the story, good work -
I really like your writing style. Somehow you put your words together a little differently than most of the writers I've read on SW but still maintain a slick fluid feel to them. Your stories read through very quickly but lose nothing in comprehension.
Very well done!!
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This was good, pretty true about love.
Nice work
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Extremely Truthful
For the first time ever I've found a short story about romance that has the tang of erotica but with none of the obscenity.
I think this is amazingly truthful on many levels.
On one level you have Joe. The man who never wanted romance yet if you recount his moments they do show a hidden snare of a romance beneath him.
On the next level you have Sarah who does wish for romance but instead enlightens herself with quick flicks.
Each character seems quite contradictory to themselves but it's remarkable about how many people's love and sex lifes are exactly like this.
Also, I loved the last chapter, gives us a secret sense of Sarah that Joe seems to have no idea about. Totally exclusive to the other protagonist and very inclusive on the responder.
Simply fabulous.

beginning: 2, language: 4, plot: 2, ending: 4, characters: 3.
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Joe Duffield had always wanted the fast lane, multiple partners, she knew only too well, exciting embraces in secluded corners, the sudden moment of quick passion in the dark. Distrusting the snares of sentiment Joe feared women were just waiting to trap him with tender love-talk.
^ One of my favorite paragraphs in any story I have read. The way you describe sentiment, and quickies was really good. It still lacked a surprise in the final sentence, to me though. -
This was really good I liked it a lot. There was so much beautiful description that helped the story along. This is really good so far and you should definately write more!*claps*

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tnx for entering and srry for the late comment.
okay this is really good. its kinda confussing at first, but really good.
good luck and keep up the great work. good job.

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