Slowly the light began to fade, the smiles on their faces began to disappear, the looks of pure happiness turned to looks of fear. The warm air became frighteningly cold; everything had come to a standstill. The ground beneath them began to tremble as the troops proceeded forward. “Curse them, the whole lot of them!” the old man Telarne muttered, “How could they dare wreck havoc on our celebration day?” Today would be the 10th year that all of Southern Bicolta had formed an alliance. The Mytain people all ran to their posts waiting to defend their city.
Author notes
This is unfinished btw
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Finish it already you bum! Goodness, you do need to lengthen your things lol. I'm read'n through your stories way way too fast! =p
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lol, i know... but i get easily distracted, so it takes me ages to like actually concentrate long enough to get a semi-good amount written... and yeah... war/battle is the next step in this one...
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The diner...nah...ummmm I dunno, I just think it would be good if you put some more effort into it
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mk, will do when i have time/ am not being constantly interrupted
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yeah, where do you think i should go with it? besides, you know, like war...
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Yea, expand on it a bit...it might actually be a good one ^.^
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I actually did start expanding on it... but it was going down the pooper so i left it off...
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