[ Who Knew ]

WHO KNEW

so gorgeous and stunning,
his walk and voice wow,

I'd to love to caress that body,
running my hands over him,

to hear his sexy voice calling me,
and enjoying his company,

we've been friends for so many years,
and became as close as shadows,

it was hard to hide my sexuality,
but he found my interests out,

but friends we stayed,
even after he knew,

he stood up for me and defended me,
when the bullies threatened me,

he would still hangout with me,
and even double date sometimes,

but then I got drunk and careless,
and my true feelings came out,

a kiss and the anger in his face,
it broke my heart to see him,

I ran out of the house feeling bad,
he's called since then to apolozize,

but the look was enough to hurt me,
it cut me deep as deep as a blade,

deeper than the blade I use now to cut,
watching the blood flow out of my arm,

I watch and cut more crying now,
over my friend my true love,

I can never face him or anyone else again,
a world that hates me for who I love,

I didn't choose this life,
but I choose this death,

my head is getting dizzy,
I hear someone coming,

it's my friend the man I love,
banging on my door calling me,

he breaks in the door so strong,
my eyes getting too heavy,

and as I see him running to me,
he holds me and I tell him,

in these last moments I say I love you,
and watch him crying as he says yes,

he always knew and wondered what if,
then he kisses my lips as I die,

as he whispers I love you too,
then he plunges the knife deep,

and my love falls beside me,
so in the next life we can be together.

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  • LadyLionnir
    June 11, 2007

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    Wow, this right here is deep. The ending was so sad, but the tale was amazing. I loved reading it and found it to be REALLY really good!! I'm suprised no one has commented this....you did an amazing job.


  • Nightscar
    March 13, 2007

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    I now it's a long tale but I believe I can write about anything so I thought I'll try to write about loves between two guys

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.