It was late when we arrived home after the party. I was elated, giddy from the alcohol and an overdose of excitement. I watched you watching me, and you smiled as I bounced around the room. I tossed a seductive grin your way, wanting to share my happiness with you.1
I could already begin to feel the pleasure, the heat pooling low in my belly as I imagined all the sexy ways you would manipulate my body. The way you made me feel was almost indescribable. I couldn't put it into words, so I decided to show you instead. In the days past since our last time together, I'd had so many fantasies about being with you.2
And I was determined to experience all of them.3
I wanted to be daring, to be as sexy as I'd ever dreamed of being, to make you want me like no man had ever wanted anything before. I felt powerful as I took you by the hand and led you to the back bedroom, the one that I had just recently armed with sexy satin sheets and a drawer full of kinky condoms. 4
It never hurt to be too careful. 5
I pushed you down to lay across the bed sideways, stripping you of your suit and wondering why you ever bothered to cover that body of yours with clothes. Looking down at the expensive threads, I knew it would be irreparably wrinkled if I didn't hang it up, so after I slipped off my dress, I took my time in doing so, bending slowly to pick up the stray items on the floor. I knew the sweetest torture as I felt your eyes like fingers dipping between my legs. My skin felt hot and constricting, and I could feel the moisture pooling, slipping from my body even as I tried to control my overwhelming response to you. 6
After putting the clothes in the closet, I lay down on the bed next to you, trailing my tongue down your torso and sharpening your senses with little nips of my teeth. I nibbled your ear, the same way you had done to me so many times before. I made your blood boil with hot kisses filled with sensual promise. 7
I closed my hand around you, the hard, heated flesh making me sigh. Moving my hand, I felt your body pulse, throbbing for the opportunity to be inside of me. My fingers did a little dance over the head before sliding down to press firmly at the base to cut off the flow of sperm. Somehow I managed to turn myself around in the bed until my face was only inches from your crotch. 8
With the tip of my tongue, I traced your length, luxuriating in the texture of you heated skin. I closed my lips around the tip of you, so ready for your penetration that I almost turned over and begged for you to take me. 9
Instead, I used my mouth to give you pleasure. I smiled around you as I heard you moan - loudly. I stimulated your body, only the pressure of my fingers keeping you away from the completion you desired. 10
Without warning, I pulled away, releasing the pressure and allowing a drop of liquid to leak from your tip. 11
Looking like you were about to explode at any moment, you lifted your head off the bed to watch me as I sat back on my tail bone and spread my legs. Your eyes grew wider as you watched the moisture drip from my body to stream down between my cheeks. I was sleek and wet, and you looked up slowly to meet my narrowed, feverish eyes. 12
With one hand, you reached out, thrusting two fingers deep into my warmth. I tossed my head back and started to pant, moving my hips in time with your rhythm. I rode your hand as if it was your body, my body beginning to glisten with perspiration. 13
I lifted my head, and my hot eyes landed on the erection standing proudly in your lap. In seemingly slow motion, I reached out my hand and touched a finger to the pearl of moisture on the head. Keeping my eyes locked to yours, I brought my finger to my lips and slipped it into my mouth. I slid it in and out of the wet haven several times, savoring the bitter taste of you.14
A flash of emotion came into your eyes, and I was shocked by the knowledge that you loved me. It was insane, I thought. I sat there next to you, my legs spread wide while you continued to thrust your fingers inside of me, my hair tousled, my body covered in sweat, seductively sucking your semen from the tip of my finger, and yet there was love in your eyes. 15
My fingers pulled away from my mouth and moved down to press your fingers more tightly into my flesh. I used my hand to spread my own moisture, wanting you to taste me the way I had tasted you, so I brought my finger to your mouth and traced your bottom lip, coating it with the proof of my need for you. You licked your lips, capturing my hand in yours and taking it with your tongue, sliding over each finger in turn. When nothing was left behind except the moisture from your mouth, you moved your tongue to the skin between my thumb and forefinger, nipping the sensitive area with your teeth, and sucking it until I gasped.16
I never would've imagined that spot to be so sensitive and to bring me so much pleasure, although I suspected I'd like anything you did to me. Heat spiraled through my body, unfurling from the pit of my stomach and bursting through my limbs like an uncontrollable force.17
It was an uncontrollable force.18
My erratic breathing was nothing more than a few ragged, unsteady breaths whenever I could manage to breathe, and my body shivered with the force of your power over my senses. You lightly skimmed your free hand over my ribs and the flat planes of my stomach, causing me to gasp and moan as my over-sensitized muscles jumped in response to your possession. Throwing myself backward onto the bed, I arched my back and drew my knees up as I fought my body's growing need for release, murmuring incoherent thoughts mingled with sultry sounds.19
Your fingers were suddenly replaced by the moist heat of your mouth, and I could hear the sounds your lips and tongue made in the wet playground they had found between my thighs. Somehow, it only served to make me hotter, wetter. The whole time your sucked the wetness from my body, I managed to maintain control...barely. But I knew I was fighting a losing battle, and if you didn't stop soon, I was surely going to...20
Without warning, the moist paradise your mouth had offered was taken away, and no part of our bodies remained touching. If you moved across the bed to get a condom, I didn't feel it, but I was so absorbed by the way my body was humming, I couldn't be sure.21
After what seemed like an eternity, I managed to pry open my eyelids to look into eyes as blue as the night sky, smoldering, smoky, dark eyes. The breath stuck in my chest, the words that were on the tip of my tongue hung suspended somewhere in thin air, my heartbeat slowed until I wasn't sure it was even still beating, and the world seemed to freeze around us as I stared into eyes filled with the one emotion I had tried not to acknowledge.22
Suddenly, like you do everything, your fingers plunged, hitting home with perfect accuracy. The thin vestige of control I had been holding on to slipped away, and my body was racked with violent spasms. From what seemed like far away, I could still feel you inside of me, your fingers moving around in circles as my inner muscles tightened around you.23
My hips moved frantically, and finding them trapped by your hands, I tossed my head from side to side urgently, arching my back so far off the bed I almost sat up, all the time whispering heated words.24
"God, I love it when you do that to me!" I managed to say around a moan of ecstasy. "All you have to do is touch me and I completely lose control." My hand reached to caress your cheek, and as the last shudders escaped me, more violent than the last, I gave up my attempt at being quiet and emitted a scream to pierce the cool night air. 25
When it was over, I looked up to find you grinning. Thoroughly exhausted, I rested the back of my wrist over my forehead and let my eyes drift closed as I questioned, "What are you so happy about? I'm the one that just had the greatest orgasm ever."26
I could hear the smile in your voice when you answered. "You should do that more often," you suggested. There was also a definite trace of masculine satisfaction mixed in their somewhere, I thought with a small smile that was all I could manage with my energy level at the moment.27
"Do what?"28
"Talk to me while you come," you clarified, laughing when my eyes flew open to shine up at you. "I like it, a lot. Just watching you come made me want to come too," you admitted with no trace of shame. I always loved that about you, your honesty and sincerity, no matter what you were talking about. 29
I let out a soft groan of absolute torture as I forced myself to roll up to a sitting position.30
"I want to watch you come, too," I said huskily. "Right now, I want to return the favor." 31
Once again, I took you into my mouth. This time, I didn't let go. 32
Sliding your moist flesh into my mouth, I allowed entrance only to the head of your erection. With my hand, I caressed you, glorying in the sounds you made. I ran my tongue up and down your length, circled the tip, lightly nipping your hot flesh with my sharp little teeth. Every moan of ecstasy escaping your lips heightened my excitement, making me more determined than ever to bring you to paradise the way you had done for me.33
I started to suck you in a little at a time. First, just the tip, slipping it in and back out slowly as my other hand went to join the first and squeeze the sensitive sacs, causing you to gasp. Then I would take a little more of you, a little more every time you slid back in, until I was forced to relax my throat muscles to take in any more. 34
Forcing myself not to gag, I began to suck. I built up the pressure, sucking lightly at first, then working up to sucking as hard as I could.35
"God, that hurts," you groaned. 36
I began to move away, wanting to pleasure you, not hurt you, but you grabbed the back of my head and held me in place.37
"Don't stop," you breathed. "It's a good kind of pain."38
I made a humming sound deep in my throat, as though your pleasure pleased me, the sound sending vibrations throughout your erection.39
"Okay, you can stop now," you said shakily as you held onto your control. "I love what you're doing, but if you don't stop, I'm gonna come in your mouth," you warned. As many times as I had done this for you before, I had always pulled back before you reached completion, finishing it with my hand or my body.40
Instead of pulling away as you had expected, though, I gave a last strong pull with my mouth. You couldn't hold on any longer. You gave up, emptying yourself in the back of my throat as you groaned my name. 41
You watched me through sated eyes as I cleaned you with my mouth, surprising the hell out of you when I swallowed every drop, you told me. I licked my lips, looking very pleased with myself, my smile seemed to take over my entire being.42
"I like doing that for you," I told you. "I like knowing that I can drive you as crazy as you make me." 43
Collapsing on top of you, I kissed you, and we could taste ourselves on each other's tongues, the different tastes mingling together to become one. It tasted like heaven, I thought.44
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Cloud 9
Impossible. No narrative could possible capture this much heat, this much passion. This story goes beyond the scope of the written word. I felt like I could read this aloud to you and watch the memory course through you. This story is indeed the amalgam of a "good night" and a good man, both of which you no doubt deserve. -
This was very hot! Great story Both parts 1 and 2...great job....Heather
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my hero
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WOW...i started reading this and and just kept reading and reading. i couldnt stop. it grasped me and wouldnt let go until i read the last letter. really really great.
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I think i've read this before but im not sure.. even if i did it was a lot better reading it now I think lol if that makes ne sense.. You did a wonderful job with it though the wording was great and there was an awesome visual.. god i needa cold shower.. Great write!
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hehe its looks like everyone loved it as did i. great write!
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this is.....wow....damn....hot!!!! i love this story. and if hun was here he would take to fruits of your labor. this story has gottne me so damn hot. sadly i have to go take a shower by my lonesome. wonderful job on this story. i'll check out your contest too. i might want to enter something.
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hold on let me go take a cold shower and I'll come back to tell you what i thought. *sighs and thinks god i need to get laid* I liked it. It was really good!
GREAT WRITE!
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wow. amazing.
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Wow, you did an excellent job with this. It really keeps you reading and locked inside the story, oblivious to the outside world. Very well written, the words, the paragraphing (is that a word?), and everything else in between. Excellent
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you got some very good comments, lol. I loved it too. Grr.
I really liked it, very descriptive. Wonderful!
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could hear the smile in your voice when you answered. "You should do that more often," you suggested.--WOW if I could count the times I hear that! I LOVE HEARING THAT! I like this piece. Rather than being just a super hot sex story it actually has some artistic value...and its hot!!
Nice work! Keep Penning!
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I definately think that was a good poem , however instead of sucking you should have been biting... drawing blood... grins i enjoyed reading it ... as for myself being excited... it did hit me a little but put in a little darker aproach and you got me
keep up the good work i hope to see another one of these soon!
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This was a great piece of erotica... actual art in writing and not just a smut story. Props to you for that.
Great job.
Elizabeth -
Thanks. Since this is series is only part of a longer story, there probably will be a part three, and maybe more after that. Anyway, I'm glad you enjoy my writing. Thanks for your comments.
~Miranda
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bravo
hmmmm miranda i know i have read this before i scrolled through your comments looking for mine but i guess not , maybe i just got off ? literally ha ha ? oh well this was a very hot detailed write that i enjoyed once again , and the continued was just as well will there be a part three ? a fan , be safe catressa -
Remarkable!
OMG! I'd read part 2 first, then this one. Now I'm really in trouble! There is smoke coming out of my computer screen! You are one talented writer! Keep it up! (pun intended)! -
I think I need a cold shower!! Or something. Something sounds better than a cold shower. Anyway....
(shaking head to try to comment)
Reading your story was better than any eroticia I have ever read....not that I read a lot of it. (ahem)
Was nicely done. I liked that they were people who loved each other and not just people whose paths crossed...that to me is the difference between erotica and pornography, at least it is what I like. I will look at other writes of yours. Kudos! Cheryl -
WOW! Holy crap! This is absolutely amazing and so hauntingly familiar at the same time! It makes me think of moments like this that I have with my loved one hehe I couldn't have put it any better, you described it perfectly and without using unnecessary words! This definitley the best erotic story I've ever read. Perfectly put!
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HHOLY SHIT!!! this was a very nintense .. hot erotica... sounds familiar actually.. LOL... God, my hands are shaking .. it was like... live porn... lol.. well anyways, great write!
Much Love,
Emily -
Yup. You are right. this is your best. Well, the best I will read tonight. Two things: I love the fact that these two people love each other and surrender totally to each other - that is very erotic, if you ask me. And, Your writing is very clean - I mean as writing - it is grammatical and your spelling is perfect...you have ability as a writer - it is not just that you tell a hot story (which you do) you tell it with style. Now I must find a way to cool off. Thinking about fishing or baseball usually helps.
Scott
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This is great..I have really enjoyed it..Very very erotic..This is a wonderful write..I am so glad that you entered it in the contest..Thanks for entering and I wish you luck..
Much love
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This write is still a sweet read keep up the goodwork M.J.
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Whoa, that was awesome. I loved it. I got many mental pictures while reading. Very good...keep it up.
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wow` this was amazing and it is the first time I have ever taken time to read a story of this kind at AP, you did a wonderful job and it is a real turn-on to read ... lol... so you got something right !!!, this is not smutty or just about sex and that made this all the better.
thank you for sharing
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OHH wow, I read this one already.... I still love it!
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this is a great poem,congrats and the fantasy
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excellent
This is an excellent tory, im still trying to catch my breath. You are right you have a gift for writing erotica. Excellent story. Fantastic, im speechless Queen
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foudroyant;ly and characteristically beautifu
WHOA!!! OMG!!!!!!!!!!! DDDDDDDDDDAAAAAAAAAAAMMMMMMMMMMMMMNNNNNNNNNN!!!!!
i'm shellshocked and cross-eyed plus my monitor is steaming up again!
squegges monitor ah that's better!!!
well i must say that has really brightened my day up.
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really did not seem like a fantasy. Very vivid and the words u used and the way you put them were great. I really dont read much erotica but this piece is awesome. I love it.. hopefully u'll write more?? great write
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Well I'll be. I'd have to say, out of all the erotica I've read on here this one has to be my favorite. Great usage of words. I love how you didn't use the same words everyone else who writes them does (me included) but used words to where you'd still know the meaning. Very awesome.
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Super Sexy!!
God this was so damn sexy and arousing!! WOW
I wanna do this with my b/f tonight.
Thanks for the idea!!
This is very well written!!
I love this story/poem!!
Awesome job!!
Keep up the great work..You should publish a book.
You have a wonderful talent!!
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Extremely well done - I would have said, had it been less tasteful, that it should have begun with the words "Dear Penthouse Forum" but as I said it was too tastefully written for the likes of skin magazines. Professional, almost, in its use of the language, and certainly erotic in nature. Extremely well done, again.
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but it was quite hot nonetheless
wow. this was so vivid. i felt like i was prying into a room with closed doors and windows. excellent imagery, an incredible attention to every little detail. quite impressive, and not just because of the subject matter. -
My goodness, well that was certainly stimulating. You do have a way with words... so naughty and nice. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for a very erotic read...
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Um was just a little confused by the whole condom business cos i'm not sure at what point it was used. But overall I quite enjoyed it! I liked the fact that even though it was romantic you didn't make it simply about sex and neither of the 2 people were simply objects.
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be talented in description...and poetically written...congratz!
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This is a Really good poem.. I love the way you wrote it too. .. I like this Piece a lot. I think you really have a talent in writing and you should keep it up! I have a contest going on so If you look at my name , I'll be there, Maybe you should enter. Hope to hear from you soon! Great Romance! You should think about publishing a book sometime Good work! -Staycee-
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omg that was so good very romantic and very detailed heh and extreamly interesting..
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Very Hot and Romantic! Perfect, the way Love should be! yes, I do remember!!!lol!!!! -
Excellent
Excellent story, VERY STEAMY!! WOW, too bad it was just a fantasy...lol.
Thanks for sharing and keep them great writes coming.
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wow, that was very good. Increadiably real. Two very luck people to have each other. You told that story increadibly well so that whoever was reading it understood compleatly how they felt. Once again, exccelent job with this work -
Best Erotic Story
Great Story, very discriptive felt like it was me in the mix and felt as if I was watching. Which that is a great way to pull the addience in and get their attention. You have passion and desire and you mix that in your work well. This write also make me remember how me and my gf spend hour worshiping each other like you wrote in you story. You also put great emotion caringness which reminds me of how much I love my gf and I would do anything for her. I think you should continue and you'll someday have a whole book of these stories, Im definately gonna buy that book if you ever do publish. Honestly great story. Hope to read more.
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Best Erotic Story i've ever read on this site
I really liked the way you used the word, "pooling", it really took away from the typical erotic vernacular that really kills a sexy write. I feel though that the second time you used it, in "and I could feel the moisture pooling", was a little over-done, even if it was only the second time. I think another word like, "inundated" would work great to keep the variety up. Perhaps i haven't read enough erotica. . .well, heterosexual erotica , but i really think you used GREAT words to describe the sensations and situations, ones i have never heard before. It makes it all the more sexy to read because it's not something you can find everywhere, it doesn't give you that feeling of jadedness, like one might get with a simply and over-done fuck without emotion. That's another thing i loved: while HIGHLY erotic and carnal, it still held in place a sense of emotion, caringness. That is waht made me simply love this peice and made me remember how i couldn't swallow it when i was once with a guy. That's a true sign that is most likely isn't meant to be cuz with my girlfriend now, i would do anything, loving her like i do
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WOW... well i wasnt really expecting that, but i kept reading till the end! that was great!!!! awsome job on this
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this is HOTT!!
wow... that seems to be the word of choice... but thats all i can find to say... its so... kinky and yet sweet and romantic and hot... very very hot... its... real... very real... and so detailed and thought out... the whole time i was reading it i was like "i'd love to be her" and then to find out that its not real.. just a fantasy!?!? that blew me away! i never knew so much detail could be in a fantasy... its so... VIVID! im just... wow... blown away... (and for some strange reason i found bite marks on my thumb... very interesting...
) its inticing too... and... just... awesome!
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There is something about an erotic write that doesn't stoop to crassness of some words, which makes the write even more erotic. Whereas on occasion it's fun to be down and dirty..I so adore writes such as this.
You have quite a talent for description. I truly felt as if I was here.
Superb piece of writing! And if this be fantasy...well then some lucky man..has a fantasy brewing that is very worth pursuing.
Very very well done..
Mary ann
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Excellent Way to go!
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EXCELLENT JOB !
THIS IS REALLY GOOD AND SPICY , it reminds me of some poems ive writen , jeje , how far does the mind and imagination go huh , excellent work, nice display of emotions , every thought was very concrete into its own destination on the write, wonderfull you got my applause aswell, you deserve it , MARY ;0) , KEEP ON THE GOOD WORK ! -
If I had a penis, I'd want you to suck it. great job!
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This is absolutly wonderful I mean wow, I have never eer read something that was this in depth and like wow, so descriptive you need to be a romance novelist this was great.. I love it
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awesome
Wow, that was great! Not only was it very...ahem, exciting, but realistic and well written too. Nice descriptions, I hope you have more of this, I'll definitly come back for it!
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yay!
wOOt!! wow this write was good, ok great. Even I got excited. It gave me good memories of this one guy I knew, I had fantasies of him forever and then I found out he did the same for me (my poem Pushing In kinda goes into that). Anyway, this was hott and ~*rawr*~ sexy, but it also has a kinda innocent quality to it, I dunno I just kind of sense that....
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Sweet goddess....that was amazeing. I could feel it as if it was really happening to me. I loved it!
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AWESOME!
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wow if that didnt do it for anybody else it sure did it for meee,,im sitting in a freezing cold room and i just now noticed it.... and im just about ready to do it myself.. not so much in detail though...LOL!!!
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well, that's one hell of a vivid fantasy. this is, of course, excruciatingly sensual and erotic. you pay great attention to detail yet you never seem ctass with your words. I liked the sense of intimacy in this write, I think achieved by "sharing" the conversational snippets.
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LOL. Actually, thanks for your comment, but the last line doesn't really tell you it's all a fantasy. My author's comment does that. If it'll help, I'll take out my comment. Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again.
~Miranda
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That was the hottest thing that I have ever read!...It was definately worth it...good job you!!!...whew...I just loved the whole thing, especially how long it is! it's perfect. I just have one proble with it...take out the last line, please!!! I'm begging you, let us believe it's real! It's so much better that way. I really suggest that you take out the very last line, other than that, don't touch a thing!!!!
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wow this is just wow lol i liked it keep up these writes up
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Thanks for your comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it. This actually started out as a scene from a book I started writing, but most of the book was stored on my computer and when it crashed I lost almost everything. Luckily this was one of the things I didn't lose, and it's also probably my favorite scene, for obvious reasons, so I edited it and put it in first person. Anyway, thanks again.
~Miranda
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Very well written MirandaNicole. Great descriptive content and imagery. You go girl! This was awesome. Very passionate and erotic. I loved it. Keep writing.
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This has such good detail! It was long, but so worth it! This is very good erotica! Please keep writing!!
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Excellent Way to go!
Absolutly sweet Nicole I'm glad that I was here to comment on this for I found it a true enjoyment to read too and I love the passion and sensuality also Very hot and passionate keep up the great work and I have an erotic write for you too and it's called Love And Chocolate and that has a sequel that I've called Blood, Chocolate, And Whipped Cream. -
Excellent
Oh that was just outstanding... I love how you didn't use slang words but made it more on the sensual side rather than giving out the idea that it's a "hit it and quit it" type of ordeal. Awesome word usage. I love how you described every singly solitary detail to such great extent. This was absolutely fabulous! Oh definitely keep it up! -
oh my gosh...i only wish that this could happ
well...wow..i was in a trance...that was really really wonderfull...so sexy and tasty...but yet it has a loving hint in it...really great...i was sucked in the whole time...just forgot about all that was around me....
really wonderful write...
keep it up...
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Holy..cow...that was incredible. I hope I run into you someday, because that story was udderly and completely poetic, sensual, dazzling..I can't say what it did to me because I'm too shy. I love how you traced around words and used others, it added depth, and it warmed every part of my body. Perhaps someday we can collaborate in our own story.
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