Jinxed Ch. 5

Chapter 5- Feast1

Two o’ clock and the bars were getting out. Drunken men and indecent women dangling on their arms staggered to their vehicles. All a car crash waiting to happen. One ill-fated man wobbled to his nearby home. He fumbled clumsily inside his pocket for his house key.2

“Bummer,” Jinx stated as his face subtly warped. 3

Before the man comprehended what was happening, temperate blood was gushing down Jinx’s waiting throat. His heart weakly thumped with the incoming sustenance. The drunks staggered corpse plummeted to the floor, landing with a resonating thud. 4

“Why do you always go for the drunks in this shit neighborhood?” Eternitys diva persona shone through her voice.5

“Because beer is gross,” Jinx managed to slur. Tripping over his own feet, he sauntered over to Eternity.6

“Lets do stuff,” his nauseating warm breath smothered her breathless nose and mouth.7

“Oh my Goddess. Jinx you are drunk,” Eternity gasped in mock-shock, waving the stench of alcohol and blood from her refined features.8

“I would rather be drunk off wine-filled veins than mundane malt liquor,” she haughtily scoffed.9

“If you get drunk either way, why does it matter?” He mischievously nibbled her ear; a hand shoved up her pale thigh and teased her lacy thong. 10

“Jinx, I am hungry,” she shoved his hand down. 11

“Not as hungry as I am,” he snarled, picking her up and slamming her against the lifeless mans house.12

“Not as hungry as I am,” He reiterated vigorously. His teeth crawled along her collarbone.13

“Jinx.” With eyes rolled in the back of her head, she bit her lip until blossoming crimson blood tauntingly trickled down her charming chin.14

“Jinx!” As she crashed against the house again and again her grasping fingernails frayed his shirt.15

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“Mmm… Jinx.” Bloody, sweaty and delirious from ecstasy, Eternity unsteadily stood up.17

“I am here to make you happy,” Jinx stated pleasantly.18

“Don’t even pretend like I started it,” she silkily pouted. 19

“At least I finish what I start.” Now standing on his feet, Jinx cockily winked.20

Ignoring the action of this self-proclaimed stud, Eternity aimlessly started walking.21

“What are you doing?”22

“That was good, but I am still hungry.”23

“Oh you are never satisfied!” Jinx playfully stuck out his little pink tongue and cheerfully bounced behind her.24

“Where are we going?” Jinx childishly pondered.25

“The rich part of town. Perhaps we will find an open back door,” she grinned slyly.26

“Why?”27

“Parties are over; the rich and drunken are soundly asleep in their beds. Simple pickings my dear.”28

“Where is the fun in that?” 29

“The champagne in richies blood is where the fun is at.” She turned around and subtly winked.30

Their presence overpowered the seemingly quiet suburban neighborhood. They had been wandering for about half an hour now, and both stalked up a cement sidewalk.   31

TO BE CONTINUED .....32

Author notes

Umm... I don't exactly know where this is going. And I was in a... um... mood when i wrote part of this. I dont know if it is as good as the previous chapters.

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  • wonderful, detailed descriptions running throughout. after reading this, like you, i wonder where this is going. as you voiced i have to agree with you, i don't think this latest installment is as good as it could be. unless you have something in mind, this chapter, much like the previous, felt like a filler chapter and nothing of signficance really occurred to drive the plot forward. i mean, don't get me wrong, it was a good read, but i just don't understand it's purpose in the overall plot design. in the first paragraph i like how you wrote "ill-fated man" as a foreshadowing of sorts on his death. and i also like how you set up the contrast between Jinx and Eternity through their favored victims (he, drunks and her, aristocratic types). good luck with future chapters
    xo Pess


  • Mind Crimes
    May 14, 2004
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    hehe this is great darling. humorous and oh so sexy. put quite an image in my head. i love every part of this story and hope you continue with it. Take care my dear.