The Night Before the Suicide

THE NIGHT BEFORE THE SUICIDE

A Gothic Horror Story

By ROBERT DAVIDSON

I have killed myself and today I find myself attending my own funeral. But last night I went down to the morgue with the police and there I identified your body.

Electric light gives a certain grace to the dead! Those awful slabs with unknown corpses laid out side by side, such rigid forms so cold on marble slabs. Water distends a corpse grotesquely as parchment skin bloats the drowned girl I loved lying there before me. Your smile frozen, seemed to be mocking me - your stiff set lips ….

And then comes the moment in which I have gone through more than I have lived in years.

Heavy with emotion, I cry, ‘Life is very cruel and love the cruelest cut of all … If I could not have you, why then?’ - Last night standing by the river alone with you, I gripped your dress and your flesh with it. I made you face the darkening water. You didn’t think I’d do it! You didn’t think I’d push! But I stood there calmly watching you struggle in the water.

What should I have done with my love for you? Hate it, fear it, because it was too much for me? Such cruel stabs of pain love gives - I felt as though I stood on the very knife-edge of life as you sank into the river.

In all things human there is a shedding of tears as we struggle with each other for love And now in a dream scream, I burst my skin open, letting the blood run, as I open my throat with a knife.

As a ghost I stand by your grave as they lower your coffin into the ground. In all the searchings of my heart I have never felt more wounded, more broken, more alone Your last words to me as were keen as blade-thrusts. Now knowing my soul would never rest, I knew my defeat was complete.

Copyright 2006

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  • tabbykat92
    April 24, 2007
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    This could be slightly confusing, but was interesting to read. Good luck in the contest.


  • jtnbuck
    April 20, 2007
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    see my drist comment but good luck in my contest i did enjoy reading this again thank you for entering my contest


  • eyeambaldman
    April 1, 2007

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    No a bad idea, if a tad confusing in places. Some minor punctuations issues here and there but that can be cleaned up through careful editing. I liked the mysteriousness of the 1st sentence but you didn't seem to follow through with it in the end. I was hoping for a reason for the main character to kill his lover, but unless I'm missing something there was none. A good idea but I feel it could be executed a little better.


  • Andrew Timothy
    March 15, 2007

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    A good idea for a story.....but you kept switching tenses and character views which should be corrected, other than that this sounds like a Stephen King.


  • Dirty and Broken
    March 12, 2007
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    3rd sentance, 2nd paragraph; really hard to read and comprehend
    otherwise, i liked it


  • EtherealButterfly
    March 9, 2007

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    Wow, there's some killer description in this!!! Good job!!! Thank you so much for entering my contest and good luck!


  • darkpaintedreams
    March 8, 2007

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    Hey, thanks for entering my contest! I really loved this piece, it was great. This is exactly the kind of story I wanted to read. Great job, and good luck.


  • InMemoryofCharlieJr
    March 8, 2007

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    This is really good and I liked it very mushc but you did not follow my directions. For one thing you had to read my short stories Mind Power 1 - 5 and then write what would happen next and finally in the notes put that the story is based on my series. You did none of this. But I did like your story but I am sory i cannot accept this entry. Thank you though. Good luck in your other contests.

    Memory


  • Mel-the-Believer
    March 8, 2007
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    This was good, but one question though what show/movie did you use? Thanks for entering. Good luck

  • jtnbuck
    March 8, 2007

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    wow this was very good i liked this thank you for entering my contest and good luck!! This was just so good the detail was just the right amount good job and keep up the good work

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