“Twenty bucks!” the exorbitant price tag surprised me, especially since this was not even a particularly pretty rose. With petals almost fully open and darkening from age, and yellowed baby’s breath, it was obvious that this rose was far from its original glory.
Reluctantly, I took the rose home and as you came out to greet me, you discovered it, and not considering its aged appearance, you brought it to your face and smiled wholeheartedly.
It was then I learned that the real beauty of a rose lies not within itself but in the love from which it is offered.
Author notes
Another "100 word" contest entry.
A contest entry
- Write a story using exactly 100 words! by Jinxgirl.
155 points, ended March 17, 2007, 43 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The last line was kinda sappy, but overall I enjoyed it.
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Al, Thank you so much for your comments! I haven't been on for the longest time and it was very nice to come back and find your notes, they are very much appreciated and taken to heart. I will be sure to return the favor by reading some of your works.
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Somewhat cliche, I have to say. Sorry, but the last line was kinda cheesy.
Yet, I like it. I love how you start this off. The rest of it was pretty good, actually.
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Oh great way of using 100 words.. so romantic and brilliant I loved it the way I imagined the rose ... the last line was equisite
Blair xoxox
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awwwwwwwww this is beautiful
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this made me smile
it's so sweet... very well written too. keep on writing!!
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wow very good short story good job i did like reading this keep up the good work
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Nice story, thanks for sharing it with us,
GoNE
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This is a really sweet story, but had I been the narrator, being the cheap person I am, I would've been like "HERE TAKE THE ROSE BACK!" lol...but this is really cute!
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really sweet story with a great message to it... i liked your use of the word "exorbitant" too. but... this was only 95 words, can you add another five in somewhere?
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