The soft drops crashed on her skin as she twirled in the night. The moon beams shone off her bare, glistening flesh, as the grass caressed her legs.
Bombarding her senses the notes cascaded upon her, led her movements in the open field.
He stood several feet away, just watching, seeing. The bright blue of his eyes shone in the moonlight as his gaze followed her every motion.
Her kick and arm extension sent the water sprinkling off her limbs in a wave. Smiling, she turned to him grasping his hands.
“I love you.” Rang her voice in the night.
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A contest entry
- Write a story using exactly 100 words! by Jinxgirl.
155 points, ended March 17, 2007, 43 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I liked this. Lovely description.
I don't think I could've done any better.
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Very descriptive...if somewhat discomfiting. No offense, it was beautifully written, but I've had my share of "sparkly" love.
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Nice imagery in this.
At first I thought the boy was just watching, not knowing the girl, which would be realistic as well. I think every boy growing up would fantasize about something like that.
But it turned into a romantic finish, and I'm sure that would melt the hearts of many readers, especially girls -
Very nice write. Gentle and touching. Gave me a warm feeling, which is great. Nicely done and best of luck!
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Wow, this is really good.
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really pretty and descriptive, i like this a lot. however, you need to add another three words in, this is only 97 words.
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I copy and pasted into word and it says it's 100 exactly...I can add three, but I think that the SW counter is off...what would you like me to do?
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Great
It was the best it possibly could've been in 100 words. Good job.
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