Toiletry Land ( poopa scoopa meets shampoo )

Way behind your toilet there is a magical germy land where all the toiletries come to life to fight the evil bacteria men. All the toiletries have failed to remain sanitary all except the poopa scoopa. The poopa scoopa lives a germ free life because the hands have never grasped him. For if they had he would have been plunged head first into the scat land.

Now the fate of all the contaminated toiletries lay in the handle of the poopa scoopa. If the poopa scoopa can vanquish the germs before the toiletries are thrust into the midsts of the round can of doom then they shall be saved.

As of this moment the hands are out on their people and the war in the many boxes between the the toiletries and the germs has almost reached it's end, until there should rise poopa scoopa.

poopa scoopa: Be swift germs of doom to quiet your reign of terror for I poopa scoopa shall make your reign be but a myth, a story to be told.

germs: you clean thing we shall take over your handle as our home your grate shall plunge into scat land by our doing.

poopa scoopa: never you shall be wiped away by the hands before I will ever plunge into scat land.

germs: we'll see about that.

poopa scoopa roams around toilet land; until poopa scoopa slid into this huge ovalish ditch. When poopa scoopa got on his handle he crashed grate first into a huge bottle of shampoo. The shampoo stood four cap lengths above poopa scoopa grate. Poopa scoopa read shampoo's label and got a huge idea. Shampoo cleans so couldn't shampoo kill all the germs?

Shampoo was thrilled by the idea of actually being used that poopa scoopa lead shampoo to the battle field where the germs were waiting. The infested hairy toothbrush had snuck up behind poopa scoopa and shampoo was horrified as poopa scoopa plunged grate first into scat land.

Shampoo knew what he had to do; he opened his cap wide and spat a huge shampoo lugi into scat land and marveled the dying germs. Shampoo then spilled his shampoo guts over all the contaminated toiletries and saved poopa scoopa along with toilet land.

From the human point of view..

Honey who spilled the shampoo all over the bathroom. Thank you honey for attempting to sift the litter box.

Author notes

i hope someone likes this hands is refering to humans form the objects point of view. "The rabid squirrels of doom have stolen my chocolate and hit me over the head with metal baseball bats."

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  • Lover of Stories
    November 2, 2007

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    My Verdict

    Funny, but not really laugh-out-loud funny. Nice piece. ^.^ There are some errors in spelling and grammar that could be corrected, but that's okay. Keep writing! And thanks for entering my contest


  • EmeraldDreams
    September 25, 2007

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    Funny piece! I like how it is from the perspective of the objects! Poor old Poopa Scoopa! lol

    Thank you for the entry!


  • elfflower1989
    September 12, 2007
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    Lol, that's cute ^^

    Sounds like a child was playing with them and the mom found the mess ><


  • Shiny
    May 31, 2007
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    umm, very interesting take. funny and a good laugh


  • LittleKt
    April 26, 2007
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    i thought this was realy funny! good job, and i like the litter box thing at the end


  • Andrew Timothy
    April 21, 2007
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    Hmm...It was imaginative, but it didn't really make me laugh...

    Thanks for entering


  • katiefran
    April 10, 2007

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    i have to agree that i sometimes thought you were talking about a toilet, but over-all this was funny! thanks for the laughs and for entering my contest! god luck

  • Kitzwa
    April 10, 2007

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    It was pretty funny, especially the end. At times it did get very confusing. For instance, sometimes the poopa scoopa seemed more like a plunger about to be driven head first into a toilet.


  • lydubs
    March 28, 2007

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    It was a cute story from the plunger's point of view, but it needs a grammar and caps check. Other than that, it was good and I liked it!


  • blink-182
    March 21, 2007

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    ummmm i dont know what to say but umm idk- it was good and funnny and thats what it was made 4 i think so u8 did good


  • Hopeh
    March 12, 2007
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    It was cute alright, and kinda funny. Good luck!!!!!

  • DustyOldHalo
    March 12, 2007
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    While not a belly laugh kind of funny, it really is funny! It’s an interesting point of view!


  • EtherealButterfly
    March 9, 2007
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    lol...this is hilarious!!! I needed a good laugh!


  • iPoopAThug
    March 9, 2007

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    Lol

    I love it. This actually was one that was what I wanted. This reminds me of the kind of thing the movie toys was like. Where like there is a whole sequence of things hidden behind even the simplest actions. I liked this but at times it was a little hard to read. I loved the ending the most cause if you read it once, and read it again, it makes more sense. I also liked your use of funny words and dialog.

    beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.


    • DemApples
      March 9, 2007
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      thank you most of the long words i learned from my older sister so it might be confusing because i don't know if i used them in the right context.

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