It was as if tears were falling from the sky. The grey clouds had taken over the sun and begun to weep. A strong wind had sprung up.
I watched as he was placed on the table. The Noble man took the carved knife and split open the man’s shirt. Then the Noble, took a smaller but sharper knife, and sliced the man’s chest open slowly. The man gasped. I closed my eyes. I could hear a woman screaming ‘no’, almost completely drowned out by the crowds cheering. I opened my eyes and searched for her. She was near the stairs, being held by two guards, struggling to get to her lover lying gasping on the table. The Noble began to whisper in the man’s ear. The crowd fell to a hush, trying to hear what was being said. I watched as the Noble whispered words into the man’s ear. The man everyone had once loved so much, but now cheered on his death. He had brought hope to our village and we had all believed in him. We wanted freedom, and that’s what he had promised. It wasn’t lies he spoke, but the truth. The man’s breathing grew.
What was his name again?
The Noble man nodded to an executioner.
What was the man’s name again? My mind had gone blank.
The man’s slowly turned his head to face the crowed. The executioner stepped forward and brought up an axe. He swung it high above his head, falling down towards the man. The man’s lover’s cries were louder now, screaming. The axe was brought down inches away from the man’s neck. The man began to smile, welcoming death. His eyes connected with mine and he smiled sweetly at me. I smiled sympathetically back, then went back to watching the axe. Within two seconds, the man’s head rolled across the wooden floor. I closed my eyes.
‘William…’ I whispered, remembering his name.
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x This is just a starting idea for a story I might write, but I don't know. I'm unsure how to write the second paragraph if I did make it into a story. Your ideas are all I care about, so please GIVE ME IDEAS!!! x
What do you think of my starting idea? [Please give ideas for a second paragraph if you have any...]
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This was good, quiet depressing in the sense his head went for a little role but good.
I am not sure of any ideas to give but you could for a second paragraph talk about how she knew him and why his head was taken off.
Good job.
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this could be a great story!! but i got nothing i could add =p keep it going and i'll read it
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Yay! Thanks for reading and I will try to think of something to write but I seriously dont know how to start it... *cries* lol thanks again!
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Good work
Wow. What a piece of work you have here. I don't know about the second paragraph, but I would suggest describing something about this William guy that made your character like him so much. What a nice work you have here...though somewhat gruesome. -
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Yay thank you very much for reading and thanks for your suggestion! Yeh, I was thinking about describing William a bit more but I just dont know where to start... Thanks very much again!
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