"There were ten thousand of us against four thousand of them. They came to us we did not come to them. It was the dead of winter. Icelandics know how to handle our winters. A time where there are winds so sharp and so cold, when they cut through you they could freeze every liquid in your body. An air so dry your nose would bleed from breathing. Oh, yes we had the advantage.
"It was an open battle on the fields of Windor. There were no sieges, no barricades, and no surprises...except one. We were cutting through them smoothly, easily. Every one of us could smell victory in the winter air. Then they came over the hill. Our enemies had reinforcements. They came from behind the hill; no one could have expected it. Some of them road on horseback others ran beside, but they were all heavily armed. I can still see their shadows as they came towards us.
"Nay, we did not give up hope. We did not stop trying, although somewhere inside us we knew we had no such chance as we may have had before.
"You all have just been recruited. You are young and fresh. You cannot have imagined how much pain I felt that day; but you will. I watched warriors die, men and women alike, my family and my friends. My own brother died in my own bloodied arms. They cut off our leader's, my father's, head. However, for some reason they kept some of us alive. They left us in the field defeated.
"And now we find ourselves up against another battle; staring death in the face. You have never experienced fear until your out on that field. They can win the battle...but we'll win the war!"
The group of warriors were settled around a fire, wrapped in furs and blankets to keep warm. They listened to the princess as she told them the story. They watched the tears run down her face and her not bothering to hide them. She was such a strong woman, stronger than most men were physically and emotionally. She was beautiful so very beautiful. Every prince wanted her but she refused to marry. Now heir to the throne she faced a whole new battle than before. She had to lead them to victory.
"What if we are defeated again?" asked one of the younger boys.
"If you expect defeat that's what you'll get!" the warrior princess spat at him "And if defeated we are it will not be accepted, nay not 't all. They won that battle; they may win this battle and many to come. Nevertheless, we cannot have ourselves thinking that way, because we will win the war. So in my father's name...kill them all."
She looked up towards the cloudy sky and, as if she knew it would happen, it began to rain. The warrior princess rose and walked away from the group of men going into her tent for some rest. Tomorrow was a big day.
Author notes
This is a new character I have been thinking of and this was the first story that came to mind. So as I post the stories they may be out of order...I hope I wont confuse anyone. If I do I'll explain and when I finish her stories I'll be sure to order them.
STRONGHOLD! I know it is a few words short of 500 and I'm truly sorry but I couldn't find a good way to prolong it.
A contest entry
- Not your average princess (A contest for anti-heroes) by Unpredictable Lover.
210 points, ended August 1, 2007, 11 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Fantasy War story by iPoopAThug.
175 points, ended November 9, 8 entries
Honorable mention
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Thoughts?
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I enjoyed it.
I liked your opening line and I enjoyed the ambush. It was unique and I am curious to see where it was going. I liked the dialog and the general way of explaining things. It was short but great.
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write more
its really good
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no worries about it being a few words short of 500 ^_^ we won't count anyway 
and to make it an exact 500 might.. break the story some pieces are better short ^_^
You have a way of narrating things that just captivated me I just am sorry it's too short - as I would want to get to know your character more The little scene reminded me of 300.. which is good, since it's one of my favorite movies
Good luck with the contest!
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write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This was well written and I enjoyed reading it. Very good job here. I love the princess. she doesn't seem like the kind of woman that wants to be treated like royalty. Very nice ^.^ Also, It takes a strong woman to lead a group of young men
Good luck in the contest
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I like this actually.
I'm really not one for the war stories, the only one that I've read that I really lke is the books Eragon and Eldest, but I was interested in this.
The writing was pretty good, but I really likeed the princess character. She seems as if she is a strong woman in every way and she's a character I would like to read about.
I think you should either go into a series of these so we learn more or make it a lot longer with detail, but I'm sure you've got it covered
good job, and good luck in the contest!
xoxo
Tay
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You write a great fantasy tale. Will have to check out the other parts.
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Good Start.
I like this character, but I was a little confused when dialogue began and ended. There are four parts to this story now? I will try to catch up on them.
Andy
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Loved it!
Vail, I love your fantasy stories! Mainly because it's showing the strength of a woman even when there was doubt against her!! Love it!! =)
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I really liked this, I could picture them all round the fire. Perhaps they kept some of the defeated warriors alive so they could feel pain at their loss? Keep writing! It's unusual to have a warrior princess, it makes this unique. Meggh xxxxxxxxxxxx p.s.
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Very cool
I really like this, i mean the good explaining! keep it up! -
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I liked this a lot. very interesting, only a few punctuation errors. I can't wait for the next one!
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