Merinthophobia

The news only arrived 2 days after their anniversary.  She read the note over and over again, it was tattered and written hastily, as many were in queue.  By now she had memorized it, only a few lines long and baring the reason for her husbands late return.  She placed the note down and blankly stared unto the rain, striking the windows with faint sound, drowning the roads and soil.1

Not a tear fell from her eyes at the moment, the news was not a horrible tragedy to her.  She hated him above any human on Earth, but at the same time, without him would not survive.  He was the source of everything. Money, Clothes and Food were all pulled in by his income, although it was barely enough.  And now, she hated him even more now that he was dead.  Without him, she would not be able to furnish her family with necessities, without him she feared for her children most.2

From his death she would get nothing, she would inherit nothing but debts and starving children.  She turned around and spotted a picture of their wedding.  She never knew what she saw in him, but now it was too late.  She began to sob and started to angrily yell at the lifeless picture.  She picked it up and threw it across the room, the wooden frame shattering on impact with the brick wall.  Then she knew why.  She had loved him more than anything, and she believed he was the same.  The jaded woman felt up her stomach and could feel the bruises caused by his true colors.  He had never loved her, but even then she still had affection towards him.3

She walked over to where the frame had shattered, but saw the picture still intact.  Out of rage she tore up the picture into many pieces and threw it into the flaming fireplace.  As it burned a remnant of the picture, the two heads kissing in matrimony missed the flame.  She stared at it and began to wonder why he had to do this to her.4

Hearing the commotion, her daughter and son ran downstairs.  They saw their mother crying by the fireplace, which was a common sight.  They considered the moment indifferent and returned back to their activities.  She could not tell them the news, for she loved them too much.  She turned back to look at the fragment that remained.  Her tears blurred her vision and she faintly saw the picture laying next to the inferno, and her rage began to fade.5

But she knew that she couldn't do this, she couldn't stay hating him.  So she stood up and held the note in her hand.  She ripped the note in half and threw it into the flames, attempting to smile between her sobs.  Maybe it was better that he was gone.  Maybe now she was no longer caged in his power.  She could live again, maybe find someone else, so she turned back towards the flame, to see the final fragment of the picture, the last sign of her husband.  Suddenly it combusted, dissipating into nothing, along with her pessimism.6

Author notes

A Woman at Her Husband's Grave
by Joseph Seamon Cotter

Peace to his ashes!
I cannot for the soul of me
Sorrowing bow,
Tho I search through the heart of me
Grieve for him now.
'Tis well he is gone
And heart-break is over,
A husband he was
But never a lover.

Ok..yea its pretty bad but im not that good at stories, this is my first ever

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  • Circuitsboard
    September 17, 2004
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    Actually, it is pretty good. I enjoyed it. Sure, there are a few errors, but none of us are perfect, and for a first story and your age, quite well done.
    I'm glad I clicked it. I applaud.


  • Medea
    May 9, 2004
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    me encanta.

    ummmm...estoy estupida....what does the title mean? this is not as bad as u seem to think it is. there was lots of emotions, but there were some grammar mistakes. overall it was well done.


  • pulsating
    May 9, 2004
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    This is quite good for your first story ever. Very engaging. Once again very nice use of vocabulary and consistency throughout the write. A nice sense of the woman, letting go and the end and tearing up the picture. Good luck to you. I hope you do well in the contest.


  • Barbara Moderators member
    May 9, 2004
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    Love tha last line! Powerful.

    This is a good story. The feelings are genuine and believable. A few grammatical errors(overuse of the comma...one of the sins that I seem to use a lot too), but overall very well done.

    Thank you for entering this

  • enividaliehs
    May 8, 2004
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    oh shoot... I have absolutely no chance...

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