Talk

“Oh, brother,” I cried into the phone, though I knew he couldn’t hear me, “I’ve been trying hard to reach you because,” I stifled a sob before continuing, “I don’t know what to do.”

I took a deep breath, attempting to calm myself before redialing. “Sorry. I’m not home right now…” I threw the phone across the room as my brother’s answering machine picked up. It crashed into the wall, leaving a dent. I didn’t care.

“Oh, brother,” I whimpered, head between my knees, “I can’t believe it’s true.”

I looked up at a picture hung up on the wall. It was me a few years before, smiling, my arm carelessly flung around my mother’s neck.

“You can take a picture of something you see,” I whispered, “In the future, where will I be?”

When my mom was alive she told me I was capable of anything. ‘You can climb a ladder up to the sun,’ she’d tell me, ‘Write a song nobody has sung or do something that’s never been done’. I’d believed her then but, now, where would I be without her?

I retrieved the phone and dialed a number at random, then pressed the receiver to my ear. “Hello?” a masculine voice answered.

“Are you lost or incomplete?” I asked the voice, “Do you feel like a puzzle, you can’t find your missing piece?”

I was answered with a click followed by a low buzz. “Tell me how you feel,” I asked myself.

“I feel,” I said, trying to regain my composure, “like the doctors, the police the relatives, are talking in a language I don’t speak. And they’re talking it to me.”

The phone rang. “Hello?” I asked, sounding stronger than I felt.

“So, you don’t know where you’re going,” said my brother, his voice soothing, “and you want to talk.”

I nodded, as if he could see me.

“You feel like you’re going where you’ve gone before,” he continued, “Nothing’s really making and sense at all,” he paused, “Lets talk.”

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  • kelseyo
    June 4, 2007
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    Umm...isn't this a Coldplay song? Not James Blunt..anyway. Thanks for entering.
    Kelsey


  • Mel-the-Believer
    May 8, 2007

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    This was really interesting. A little confusing at points, but I enjoyed it. Thanks for entering. Good luck. God Bless!


  • simply.me
    May 1, 2007

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    good.. but it sounded too much like a song... i dont know what song you based it on but i think you used alot of the exact lyrics. i want something inspired by a song but not using alot of the lyrics. good try, good luck ^^


  • Dimitri
    April 20, 2007

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    Great!

    I don't know about a song (I'm not the best on music), but it's a great story. I like the allusions to deeper subjects.


  • Taylor Renee
    March 6, 2007

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    wow this was really good!!! i loved it! whats all this about a song??? well, i loved it! great job with this, fantasic emotion!

    tay

  • Daoine
    February 25, 2007

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    "any sense at all" I love it. You have the kind of talent to create a scene inside the reader's head...emotions do that. You brought it to life. It reminds me of one of my earlier writes called The Key.

    Daoine


  • kkz2343
    February 25, 2007

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    I know that song, and I really like how you put it into the story!!! Hehe!!! I like that song alot!!! It's a great story!!

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