A NEW WORLD IS RISING FROM THE DUST
by ROBERT DAVIDSON
Something new is happening in the world today
You can feel it throbbing in the air
Not even a climate change can break our will
'Cause we've seen the writing on the wall.
It's time, they're chanting. for a new age of hope
'Cause we've all learned how to trust.
You can even touch it with your out-stretched hand -
A new world is rising from the dust.
But then I awoke from my nightly dream
I was trying so hard not to scream.
The world was not at all as I would have it seem.
We're all learning to trust the brotherhood of man
You can feel it throbbing in the air
Not even terror-bombs can kill our new-found joy
'Cause this is the time for a brave world new.
An earthquake breaks the old order all apart
'Cause it's all decay and full of rust.
People no more crying 'cause they're sad or poor -
A new world is rising from the dust.
But then I awoke from my nightly dream
I was trying so hard not to scream.
The world was not at all as I would have it seem.
We're all stretching out a kind neighbourly hand
You can feel it throbbing in the air
Not even a tidal wave can break our bond of love
'Cause we've seen the writing on the wall.
Hurricanes blow the old beliefs all apart
We know for sure we're never gonna bust.
People no more crying now they're rich and free -
A new world is rising from the dust.
And then I awoke from my nightly dream
I was trying so hard not to scream.
The world was not at all as I would have it seem.
Copyright 2005
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A contest entry
- After the End by roars-in-public.
388 points, ended July 6, 2007, 32 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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hmm... intresting. I like it, good job and good luck.
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Hey, I like the poem. It sounds really good with the rhyming.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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I like the way you rhyme in this piece. It was very interesting and different from what I expected to get in my contest. Thank you for entering and good job.
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Original
This is more of a poem than a story, but it works pretty well. I like the combination of terror and hope. Your rhyme scheme flows well, for some reason 'bust/dust' seemed a tad forced, only IMO
It holds interest and the repetition of the nightmare keeps it suspenseful. Good luck in the contest!
beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 4.
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