I heard the scream as clear as if it should have been me myself who uttered it.
"Cassandra!" I yelled, but there was no answer.
I ran from my bedroom as fast as I could, and entered her room.
The room was empty.
Her bed was messy, and the big mirror on the wall was broken.
The curtains by her window blew in the wind, making me notice that it was open.
I ran to the window and looked outside, but I could see nothing.
The window was situated right above a steep cliff, leading straight down to the sea, probably more then thousand feet below.
And then I saw it... her red dress, floating in the sea.
A tear rolled down my face, as my only companion through the last ten years was now gone.
On the desk in front of the broken mirror, lay my book.
The book that I had been so careful to hide the last ten years.
A book with a red cover, exposing nothing of its content. But now she knew what I had been writing all these years.
It was not a diary or a journal, like I told her. It was a story, a story I started ten years ago.
A story that she just finished.
It was a story called, Cassandra.
It all started ten years ago. I was a writer, out of money and out of ideas.
I just walked about in my lonely house and thought, thought and pondered upon what I should write.
But when I finally thought of something to write, I noticed that I was out of paper.
I walked down to the nearest village, which is really a long walk, and I tried to find some cheap paper.
But, I was out of luck. Paper was expensive, and I owned almost no money.
But as I was leaving, sad and depressed over not getting to write down my stories, an old woman approached me.
She smiled a gentle smile at me, and told me that she would give me a whole book with paper, if I just gave her one silver coin.
I thanked her very much, and gave her two. She smiled at me again, and told me to write something beautiful.
I answered that I would, as I started walking back up to the top of the cliff, where I live.
That very night, I started writing. I had a solid idea, of a girl that was lost after a shipwreak, and had to go to the only house around.
In the story, there lived only one man in the house, and he welcomed the girl, and took her in as his own.
But when I had written the first few pages, about the man and the girl meeting, I noticed that I was out of ink.
Now, Ink was cheap, but it was far too late to go back down into the village, so I decided to wait until the next day.
The very next morning, someone knocked at my door. Now, this was strange. I rarely had visitors, and if I had, they did not come this early.
So I opened the door, and there stood a lovely young girl. All her clothes were wet, and her long golden hair as well.
I told her to come on in, and she did. I lit a fire in the fireplace, and made her something hot to drink as I wrapped her in a blanket.
As I sat down beside her, she told me what had happened. Her father was some sort of a travelling buisniess man, and he had to take her on his journies.
But this time, their ship had been in a storm, and shattered against the cliff.
She had somehow managed to climb up, hoping there was somebody there.
That night, I let her sleep in my bed, as I walked down to the shore and looked for other survivors.
I found none, not even bodies. She was the only one left.
When I returned home, she was still sleeping, and I decided to write some more.
Since I had not yet been to the village, I had to write with my own ink, a mixture of coal and liquid, but it worked rather well.
I continued my story about the shipwrecked girl, as I suddenly relized that the events of the day were actually quite alike what I had written.
I took it as an odd coinsidence, but was inspired by my own acts as I continued the story.
I wrote that the man went looking for other survivors, but found none. But then I started wondering... How did I want the story to turn out, in reality?
So I wrote a couple of lines about what happened the next day in the story, but in the end, my homemade ink didn't work all too well, so I stopped.
The next day when I woke up, I realized that I did not yet know the girls name, so when she woke up, I asked her.
She told me that her name was Cassandra, and she was 10 years old.
Cassandra... It was the same name I had given the girl in my story... And she was of the same age.
I left her alone when she ate breakfast... I had to go out.
I walked along the cliff and enjoyed the ocean air for a while. The things I wrote about Cassandra seemed to happen.
I had suspected it the day before also, so I had written a test. I wrote that after breakfast, Cassandra almost choked, but I walked inn, and saved her.
So I waited a whiled, before walking back into the house.
As I opened the door, I saw cassandra, all red in her face.
I had not written any details about at what point I walked in, so she seemed to have been choking for some time.
I cursed myself for making such an idiotic test, I could have written something completely else, but chose this.
I ran over to her, and hit her back with my hand. She caughed up a big piece of food.
I hugged her, and told her to be more careful from then on. And then I asked if she would like to live there with me.
She said she'd like that, and she smiled at me. I remember that smile very well.
That day, I went to the village, and bought some ink. But when I came home, I didn't write.
I wanted to know what happened if I didn't write. I wanted to see if she would react at all, or if she would just go on as if I had never written a word.
I hoped for the latter, that she just went on as a normal kid.
But I was wrong.
The next morning, I went to check on her.
Her room was empty, and I could not find her anywhere in the whole house.
I went outside and looked for her, hoping I would find her somewhere in the area.
I called her name for hours, but I could not find her.
I rushed back to the house, and opened the book.
After a little while, I had written that she had been out and picking flowers and came back in the evening.
And as I wrote, it happened. In the evening, she came back with a buch of flowers that she gave me. Just like I had written.
The next couple of years, I did not dare to stop writing about her for even one day.
But one thing I could not write, was her emotions. But, she grew to love me, and I loved her.
I considered her a daughter, but I kept the book hid from her at all times, to prevent her from being scared.
But as the years went, so did the pages. And as I had only one pages left, I knew I had to do something.
The problem was, I did not know what. But, I tried the only thing I could think of, namely, starting a new book.
So, I went down to the village and bought a book. It was also almost 10 years since I had first met Cassandra, so I wanted to celebrate.
She had become a beutiful young woman, and I loved her immensely.
I wrote in the last page of the book. I wrote about a wonderful day. A day when we both laughed and memorized over the last ten years.
We relived all the good times, and we went picking flowers.
I baked her a cake, and we read some old fairytales at night. I know, she was a bit old for it, but she loved it.
But then, when she went to sleep, I had to go down and start the new book.
As I wrote about the next day, I shivered. I had no idea whether or not it was going to work.
I wrote that she woke me up in the morning, and that we both walked down to the village, and had a fun day.
As I was finished writing, I smiled. I was almost sure that it was going to work. It felt good.
But the next day, I woke up when I heard her scream.
That was just a few minutes ago.
The new book was not working.
She was gone...
I missed Cassandra already.
I could still see her red dress floating in the water.
And then I thought about how I was before Cassandra came into my life.
I was a lonely writer, out of ideas.
So I did what I felt I had to. I followed her.
I jumped.
Author notes
The idea came to me when I heard this line:
"She hath no life but the one he for her wrought"
From the song Cassandra, by Theatre Of Tragedy
(That makes it option 5 AND 6 in... a contest... Can't remember the name, but the judge will know)
A contest entry
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Comments
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Awesome. Some small minor mistakes here and there, but really amazing otherwise, and actually suits the song.
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If you say that her curtains were blowing in the wind, you don't need to say that that made you realize it was open, it's pretty obvious. It would sound better if you maybe said something like - I realized the window was open as I watched the curtains blowing in the wind. The way you have it isn't very smooth.
The main character doesn't seem to be very upset about the loss of his companion. A single tear and then it's back to the story.
The man doesn't seem too surprised or skeptical at the fact that his story is coming true.
There's really no way to choke for a while without dying first and slapping someone on the back will at most make the choking worse, leading to death. I'm not sure what time period this story is supposed to be, but if the Heimlich hasn't been invented yet or this is another world completely, then you should atleast describe doing something like it.
You don't explain why he couldn't write about her emotions. Is it a choice he made or does the book not allow him to?
That must've been a humongous book to be able to contain 10 years of writing. I guess it all depend on how much he wrote each day though.
How did she find the book? If he hadn't written it then how did that happen? Shouldn't she have just disappeared?
I think you can get rid of the last line. You don't have to come right out and say "I jumped," the reader is able to understand this from the sentence right before.
There's not a lot of detail in this story. It seems rushed and it doesn't flow well. I like the idea, though. I'm sorry if I sound harsh, I only want to help. -
Interesting story. Thank you for entering it. Here are a few things that I caught -
-That very night, I started writing. I had a solid idea, of a girl that was lost after a shipwreak, (shipwreck)
-As I sat down beside her, she told me what had happened. Her father was some sort of a travelling (traveling) buisniess (business) man, and he had to take her on his journies (journeys).
-as I suddenly relized (realized) that the events of the day...
-I took it as an odd coinsidence (coincidence)
-She caughed (coughed) up a big piece of food
-she came back with a buch (bunch) of flowers
-She had become a beutiful (beautiful) young woman,
Sorry to nitpick but with the buttload of comments you have I thought this could help.
That would be one HUGE book!
I guess it depends on exactly how much he wrote each day, a paragraph or a page.
Reminded me of Delirious except not funny. But of course you weren't trying to be
Good read, good luck.
Jack
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What a beautiful idea! I like that it seems to be written at some time after the narrator jumped, perhaps on his way down.
The way it is structured, with each sentence starting a new line, threw me off for a while. It makes it appear to be a poem, but it has no certain rhythm. Just a little thing that didn't work for me. But overall, great work! -
Ooh, I love it! Very nice! I so loved the premise of the story, and how at first the writer played with what he did with the girls' life. It had a good feel to it, even at the end, you wrapped it up nice and tight. I was kind of hoping he'd go looking for the old woman again, to see if he could get another book from her, but oh well.
Typos:
more then thousand feet below. s/b more than a thousand feet below.
shipwreak s/b shipwreck
Now, Ink was cheap, s/b Now, ink was cheap
travelling s/b traveling
buisniess s/b business
journies s/b journeys
relized s/b realized
coinsidence s/b coincidence
cassandra s/b Cassandra
caughed s/b coughed
buch s/b bunch
beutiful s/b beautiful
Really, spell-check is your friend. Overall, a great tale though. Nice and short, and the more powerful for its brevity. I like it very much! -
Awesome
This is a truely amazing write...I...Well...I don't know what else to say. I was completely spellbound to it. ^^
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Amazing
I liked the idea of the story and I think if you wanted to, you could definitely add in some more details and really feel like the reader is there with the characters instead of just going through the events of the story. I especially liked the ending...no, please don't stare at me. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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i loved it! great job!
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I LOVE this story! It is really well written and Ace!
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Wonderful!
The story reminds me of a movie i once watched. but it was exquisite and wonderful... the power in it... it was enchanting and sad. I LOVED it! -
Wow. I liked this a lot.
I'm bookmarking.
--Aden
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Great job. Beautiful details, good plot, a true work of art. Once again, great job.
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This is beautiful, I reall like all of it and hope to find more like it, it made think, and for that I comend any writer, thankyou for sharing such a beautiful story.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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I'm not sure if your layout is intentional or if it is SW messing up. Each line doesn't need to be a separate paragraph unless it's dialogue. Clicking "fix line spacing" would make it sort better and make it easier to follow.
"and" or "but" shouldn't start sentences unless they're in dialogue. If possible try to join it with the sentence before or try rewording.
Double check spelling "shipwreak" is "shipwreck"
Sweetly done story full of emotions. If you do a bit of tweaking you have a lot of possibility with this one.
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Congrats on your gold here, and the other trophies. You've done well with this story.
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This was wonderful. I really loved it. Best piece that I've read here in Storywrite so far since I'm new. The plot was beautiful.
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 1, characters: 5.
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really good
you wrote the story well, using the right details and... wow. good.
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This was such a sad story, and so original. I really enjoyed it, and I hope you write more like this, Good luck with the contest!
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This is a good story. The plot was original, and there were a lot of very good parts in it.
However, there were several typos in this, and in some places the formatting you had chosen made the story seem slightly disjointed.
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Wow. I enjoyed this. It was sad that she suicide. I am so happy that you entered it. This is art. I dont know how to express y feeling for this. I love it so much, publish it and make it a classic
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Wow, this was very good. I luved your storytelling, you're very talented. The end surprised me that she jumped, but that's a good thing, i like surprises. I just can't get over how interersting this story was. I liked it a lot! Very creative! There were some spelling and gammer mistake here and there, but they weren't a big problem. keep up the good work! Good luck with the contest!
--Greeneyes
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Beautiful! *tears up*
I'm not crying! I have somfin' in my eye. [somfin', deliberately mispelled.] Wow, uber deep, buddy. That rocked so hard, you don't even know. I recently saw an hor show about almost the same thing. Accept, ah, if I start now, I'll go on rambling. If you want I can talk to you about it over the Pm's, lol. But whatev', this story was beautiful. -
Do you write anything that is horror or uber depressing? I mean you're very good at it...Anyway... I really loved it!!! The only thing I tought was off was how he reacted knowing she was dead, at the beginning and the end. It seems too calm. Maybe it's just me. Oh, and you spelled beautiful 'beutiful' in one place. And if i'm being nitpicky, the spacing made it hard to read. Now that I've pointed those things out. I loooooooove it.
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wow
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The plot of the story was amazing and very creative. I very much enjoyed it. But you do have a couple of spelling mistakes and grammar mistakes along the way.
I don't know if it's just me but I like it when stories are in paragraph form, so maybe that's one thing you could work on =)
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Actually, Drac,
I really loved the story. You have a good imagination and the very good nucleus for a tale here. I have to (although it's not quite my perogative) take exception with your ending...(I hate to see a good man jump! (lol)) There were so many other ways out of this tale....The old woman (who asked you to write "something beautiful") something else you could have written that made Cassandra take flight...Your getting tired of her and, in your anger writing her demise...having second thoughts only too late...etc. BUT...truly, according to the rules (I know, what rules!? and who cares?!) one is NOT "supposed" to take this way out. You don't just JUMP out of your story (and live to tell about it!)
Anyway, Drac, be careful about some technical things...for example the line about "memorizing?" I didn't understand what you meant. Look it all over once you write it. Iron out the little kinks and wrinkles. But one the whole...very nice. You are a talented guy. Clean up the act...and CARRY ON!
Good luck!
GA
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This was interesting, a little confusing and hard with the wording and all but good.
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OMG OMG OMG I sooo totally heart this. Your writing style is different, and I loved it. It had an effortless feel to it, and it flowed really really well. It was really well-written and I fell in love with it. Great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Omigawd. This story has won so many contests. I really liked how this was talking about a story that is inside of a story that's a story in my contest. A bit confusing what I just said but no matter what. I though it was very good. Great job.
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WOW! This is incredible! Just the attention to detail that went into everything, from the colour of Cassandra's dress, to the feeling of the writer when he realizes that she is gone forever. And the end was just... Brilliant! Best of luck in the contest!
Regards,
Laura
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Ooohhh good work I lik this, thanks so much for entering
Lady Madeline.
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I officially love your writing style.
And I LOVED the plot of this...Though it was rather short, the idea of is was fascinating. I especially enjoyed the detail of how she disappears when he writes nothing about her at all. It would have been interesting if you had elaborated on the ten years that they knew each other. More specifically, it could become very interesting about how the writer feels about Cassandra. Perhaps he could become "addicted" to his character in the story (and could fall in love with her, etc), or wonder over the morals (ethics? I'm not sure which word I want to use...) of controlling another person's life (or the morals of a WRITER "controlling" a CHARACTER'S life in a book; this could prove especially interesting. The writer could begin to hate his profession and renounce it). Oh, the possibilities!
~ [eRi]ca ~
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Interesting and creative plot line! This is almost worthy of being published. Emotions were flying! I really enjoyed it.
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Wow! I'm not greatly experienced when it comes to commenting, especially on this site, but that was a really, really good read. It wouldn't be out of place on my book shelf and I'm extremely jealous of your seemingly effortless ability to grip the reader.
No technical faults that I can spot either.
This is damn good, Drac!
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this is a really great story!!! wow you seem to get insipiration from any place a all!!! its sad, almost heartbreaking!!! thanks for entering and good luck!!!
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wow... you entered the same story in two of my contests... crazy! I re read and still love it!
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So, I'm taking the extra time I have to read everything..because my gut instincts that you were an amazing writer..were definitly true!
So, this has a certain raw elegance to it..which I love..like it's written so proper and well..elegant..but something like Cassandra choking on food..not so elegant..where the rawness comes in..
I love how he receives the book from this woman and he writes in it and it becomes true..and not only that..she disapears when he doesn't..oh man..and the end! He kills himself..and the dress floating in the water..it makes me wonder if that means, when she was shipwrecked..she was killed in the process and one of her dresses sort of, I guess conveinently floated around at that time..I don't know..I'd need to create a huge theory about this story in order to make sense..which brings me to my next point..
My head is whirling with ideas/theories about what could have happened and what did happen and everything..again..leaving it open to interpretation..
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Pretty good story, Drac! It kind of reminds me of a movie I saw recently. There are some spelling and grammar errors but you can fix those easily. Good flow to the story. Good ending!
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woah! that kept my attention the whole way through! your writing is so realistic i felt like i was in the story. loved the ending! great job
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This is so good. I'm speechless. I know I can always count on you for a good story!
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Wow, this was a really cool idea! I always wondered what would happen if your stories came to life... This was amazing. I could imagine everything happening. The characters weren't described as well as they could've been, but it was wonderful all the same!
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Some very strong emotion is expressed in this very tragic story. Interestingly told by a narrator who writes part of the story and then it happens in real life. Awesome with a great original plot.
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I loved it. The idea is great! The details are awesome and I just wished there was more. Great short story!! Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering. -
wow!!!
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I don't think I've ever read something so effing cool!!! It's really well written. Good job! ^_^
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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thnx for entering and srry for the so late comment. this is really good. i really enjoyed reading this story. its very well written. good luck and keep uo the great work.
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Interesting concept, to be able to write what one does in the future... I liked it.
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Pretty nice, why'de you kill em *
* I mean come on. I like the emotion it showed for him to follow like that, (or maybe he's just crazy.) We give Cassandra a three out of five.
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Excellent
I love stories with strong sense of emotions and strong ideas. This story is the best story I've read so far. To get that much from an inspiring lyric, you must be a genius author. I would love to read more of your stories and maybe you can help mine get better.
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 4.
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Thank you so much!
I will surely check out some of your work, though I doubt I can help anyone get any better... But you flatter me
And please, feel free to read more of my stories, that's always welcome
Again, thanks
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Thanks for entering my contest. I'm commenting on this again and I ignored my previsouly one. The plot and idea of this story was amazing and I just loved it. I appreicate that you entered this in my contest.
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Beautifully written. I loved the whole idea and plot of the story.
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Breath taking.
Fantastic. I'm usually not a sap for these kind of stories, but this is by far the best piece of work that I've read at story-write since joining yesterday. And I think it will be a hard one to top.
Overall, great beginning, middle, and end. I don't know of any writer that could have said it better. I admire you very much, and I would be honored to read some of your other stuff.
ONLY thing out of place: you have a couple miss-spellings. Honestly, I don't think those really matter, because whatever you want to say in a story you should just be able to write it, without having to worry about stupid things like grammar and spelling.
However, some people that run contests seem to be nuts about grammar and spelling. So just a tip if you want to win big big points!!!
Good luck in all your contests! Thanks for providing an entertaining read.
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beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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^_^ Yep, I admire Drac a lot too
and... english is NOT his first language he is from Norway neat, huh? ^_^
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Aw
That was insane, awesome idea. Brilliant. I wonder if the book he bought..was magic?? lol doesnt matter if it's not, just the idea of the whole story. Tragic. Awesome story, I have to take grad pictures right now...lol so I prolly won't be smiling. Anyway great ending, sad but it totally worked.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Hmmm... now i wanna go check that song out.
i liked it! otherwise, why review?
i hope you don't mind if I cut this short and applaud you instead... I burnt one of my fingers and now my hand's out of comission.
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wow
this is really, really awsome! The format flows, the mood is well done, it's just awsome!
it kinda reminds me how the pen is stronger then the sword, but in a whole different way...
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the greatest stor y i have ever seen
the greatest stor y i have ever seen
omg that is sooo cute i love this story. I am crying know so thanks but i really needed to read something like this. it was beautiful. i feel like crying or something, for cassandras death. i said it before, and i hope you dont mind if i say it again. it was beautiful. you are a great writer, and i loved the description, but most of all i loved the idea.this is indeed an artistically masterful piece of writing that i am glad i read. youe discriptions were mesmerizing. i was kept on the edge of my seat the entire time and the ending was enough of a surprise that i was left with the breath knocked out of me. a truely compeling little story that deserves recognition!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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omg that is sooo cute i love this story. I am crying know so thanks but i really needed to read something like this.
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it was beautiful. i feel like crying or something, for cassandras death. i said it before, and i hope you dont mind if i say it again. it was beautiful. you are a great writer, and i loved the description, but most of all i loved the idea.
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this is indeed an artistically masterful piece of writing that i am glad i read. youe discriptions were mesmerizing. i was kept on the edge of my seat the entire time and the ending was enough of a surprise that i was left with the breath knocked out of me. a truely compeling little story that deserves recognition!
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it was sad,great description. Actully the best "descriptional" in a story i have ever read.
The dialogue was good, but i think you need abit more.
Great way to get insparation. I might try listening to some music to inspire myself.
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wow i love the way it flowed! kept me interested all the way through...you write like you are experienced and yeah thats all i can up with...well done!
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wow. that was.. just really good! kept me going. i really liked it. great job.
only two little errors i caught..
"companion trough the last then years"
probably could be something like
"companion through the last ten years"
over all, i really liked this story.
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Hehe, thanks for the kind words
And of course, silly errors
I shall fix them at once
Thanks
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*silence*
That was probably the best story I have read on here in a long long time. It flowed very very nicely. I was stuck in the story all the way to the end. It was very good.
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wow. this was an AMAZING story!!! it was very creepy, but im glad that it wasnt gory. and im also glad that he was a father figure in this one. it was unconventional and terrific.
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Well, the end scared me.
Okay, This was the awesomest stoey i ever ever read. It's so good but It's kind of weird that when he started a new book she went a way cause she liked live in thwe old book and when the old book was finished, so was she. Right?
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You are indeed right
Hehe =)
And thank you for all the kind words
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Wow. I really like this story. Defentilly a finaist. * wink wink* . Well, I really like the Story line. It was just short enough. If you added for detail it wouldn't be as great as it is!!!:]]. I luv it. As I can tell, they rnt really any big mistakes. :-]]
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Whee, thanks alot
*Wink back*
Thank you for the kind words
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Do you believe in Destiny?
I do. Hmm... this showed a bit of how I think things are bound to happen Not literally or word for word - rather, I think we all "write" our own fates (As the poem Invictus said, "I am the master of my soul, I am the captain of my fate"
It was haunting how everything he had written just... HAPPENED. It scares me to think that someone else could be in charge of my own life, but at the same time, it was beautiful - the man's act of writing spoke enough of how much he loved Cassandra. It IS very sad though, that like the book's pages, the years in our lives our numbered too ^_^
Him killing himself seemed like the most appropriate thing to happen - he did lose his beloved "daughter" after all
really sad... you've made me sad You manipulated my emotions through this piece *claps* as great authors would. Thank you for sharing this!
P.S. Hey.. I just realized.. if I had a book like that, MAYBE my muse would let me write more
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Yes, it was ment to contain some symbols and metaphors, hehe And I believe it too, that we write our own fates.
Yes, it's like our lives are slowly turning the pages, until the inevidable end.. Which is what I wanted to show
Hehe, why do I always make you sad?
Hehe, sorry
But I hope it's the beautiful kind of sad again
And again, thank you for all your kind words
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It IS the beautiful sad ^_^ and you also made me think *taps chin and thinks*
*leaves that would last Mads his whole lifetime* woot!
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Whee, thanks
*Made Rachel think, Is proud* hehe
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