Dressed To Die

He stretched, yawned, and craned his neck about, searching through the early morning fog for the silent figure that had last been perched upon the giant granite boulder by the steam that trickled merrily in tune to the local birds morning prayers. Sighing as it became apparent that the stranger was gone, he rose and began to gather the remainder of his equipment, mourning the loss of what had been ruined in the previous night's tussle. He really wanted to know who is saviour was... or at least to see his face.

Collecting some of the somewhat soggy remains of his notebooks from the rocks, and finding a broken pencil stub, he began to sketch what he could remember of the hooded fighter... the dark cloak of an indistinguishable colour, glimmering in the darkness, rendering the wearer completely invisible in his surroundings; the tall, slender body structure, so quick and silent, yet a surer and stronger fighter one would be hard pressed to find. And... the talisman. A silver bangle, on a simple chain, drawn from within the cloak and thoughtfully examined while the stranger sat perched in the moonlight on the large rock dominating the clearing.

Engrossed in his sketches, Reion didn't notice the silent figure currently residing on the rock, peering over his shoulder at the shadowy figure emerging on the paper, and he started in fear when a soft rustle announced it's presence. Whirling about and ready to run, Reion's eyes locked onto those of his observer, and found a pair of familiar eyes silently gazing back at him.

Blinking, heart still pounding, Reion silently gathered the papers as they lazily floated about the clearing, eyeing his old friend, searching for time's unavoidable affects. The same deep, thoughtful blue eyes still glimmered from underneath the familiar shoulder length tangle of red-brown hair, with the chilling solitary natural white highlight framing the pale freckled slender face.

"You're... you're alive."

Author notes

Here's installment number one of the DTD series; it was left behind at AP during the great switch, and I figured I'd move it over to save readers the hassle of hunting for it.  

If you'd like to see the original: http://allpoetry.com/poem/1207553



Written April 1st, 2005

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  • sodancewithsoda silver member
    February 21

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    Nicely done I could "see" most of it in my mind, as I read. I admire the drawing skill your character has - usually, when I draw something, it only slightly resembles what I intended it to look like... and the image in my mind gets muddled up, and I kind of forget what I meant to draw

    Btw,
    He really wanted to know who is saviour was... or at least to see his face.
    is should be his? or this?

    Anyway, thank you for sharing this


  • The Cube
    March 9, 2007
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    Wow

    Very good work here indeed. It truly is unique in its own form with mysterious thoughts and wonder in it. If there is more to this story then I shall have to search it out. Thank you for sharing.

    D!b^ch! -- Z3ku13


  • kkz2343
    February 22, 2007
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    This is the second CLIFFHANGER that I've read in my own contest!!!!!! AH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    Jeez. Finish your stories people. I luv them and i want to know what happens.PLEASE!!!!
    Good luck in the contest and let me read the rest of this story!! or else...


  • Oblivion Kitty God silver member
    February 21, 2007

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    Well. There are a couple of things. One, this is too short for my contest. I requested that the submitted story be at least 1,000 words long. Secondly, I haven't the foggiest about what is going on in this story. Yes, I understand that this is, in essenece, the introduction to the rest of your story, but even the introduction needs to have structure and a point.

    Regardless, this is nicely written and sounds like a very interesting idea. I'd like to read more of it when I get the chance. Good work.


  • me alone
    February 17, 2007
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    I"ve said it before, but once agian amazing!

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