"All must bow down to the Ferret Lord" said Fred the royal jester. As I took my bow, you might think its preety low for a human to bow down to a ferret but I have to if I want to stay alive. You see, he is our lord and if we dont do what he wants us to then we die and I cant die because there is this preety girl who I am going to ask out to the royal dance tonight. Her hair blows in the wind as like a peaceful hairy, greasy, and flakey and dont forget about frizzy thing you have ever seen. Im just kiding. (wispering) "wait I have to be quite our lord is about to speak". "I the Ferret Lord have something to say to all of you. There is a war going on right as we speak and it is coming to us as we speak. I will pick a random name out of a hat. Whoever it is will take one for the team and be a suiced boomer. "Oh no that better not be I need to ask Sandy the girl I was talking about out to the dance. "The guy I pick Is Bash -Buns of Steel. No thats me. 2 hours later. "I am 5 minute from death but at least Im with you sandy. Before I die Sandy there is something you should know"said Bash. "What is it Bash". said Sandy. "Sandy I love you and I always will.
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there are several spelling errors.
you could do with making this into paragraphs, instead of just one rambling paragraph. it would help to distinguish thoughts from speaking, and from action, and to distinguish who's speaking at different times.
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Veryyy random... But kind of humorous!
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