Radafellia went to the grocery store one winter afternoon. She went to aisle two, to get some ragoo. She saw a guy; he had long black hair tied back in a ponytail. He wore a bright orange T-shirt, a pair of lime green shorts, and purple rubber sandals, that smelled like grape. He was pretty strange, but Radafellia didn’t think so.
He started towards Radafellia. Closer and closer, he came until he reached her.
“Whoa! That’s totally awesome dude! I like love ragoo too. I’m Skipo!”
“I’m umm… Ra- Radaf.. Rada- Radafellia.”
“Whoa! Cool name!” He replied. “So, umm.. do you like wana go out on like a date? To the Petting zoo?”
“Oh, yes, I’d love to!” Radafellia answered. And the two of them made plans to go to the petting zoo.
The next day Radafellia went to the petting zoo with Skipo. They were having a great time petting the baby goats, when, all of a sudden, the goats, started to shoot out poop! One by one, Radafellia daintily dodged all of the flying pieces of poop, when, OH NOOOOO! Skipo got hit in the face with a turd! “AHHHHH! MY EYES ARE BURNING!” Skipo screamed. Radafellia rushed him over to the water fountain to wash of his head.
Later that day Skipo took Radafellia to Pickle Town home of the pickles, her favorite restaurant. They sat there quietly, eating their pickle ice cream Sundays, when, suddenly Skipo asked her for another date. And they made plans to go to the grocery store.
The next day Radafellia went to the grocery store with Skipo. They went to aisle two, where they saw the ragoo. Suddenly, Skipo started to sing a song about aisle two, where they saw the ragoo. When he was finished, he blurted out,
“Radafellia, will you marry me?” Even though she was only eight years old, she excepted.
Radafellia and Skipo moved in to the empty storage room in the grocery store, right next to aisle two, where they saw the ragoo. It worked out great, because they didn’t have to spend any money on food!
About five years later, they had three kids. Ralph was four, Richie was three, and Ruth was two. Skipo and Radafellia agreed that they should all have names that started with R, like Ragoo. Ralph, was mean, and liked to scream. Richie was sweet, but liked to cry. And Ruth, was rambunctious, and liked to burn things.
For the rest of their lives, Skipo and Radafellia lived happily with their children, and forever shared their memories of aisle two, where they saw the ragoo.
Author notes
ragoo is not the sauce, i dont know what it is my friend taylor made it up, in fact she made most of this story up, but i added to it, and wrote it down, yey taylor
A contest entry
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Ah ha! So they were children...that makes the whole story make sense, lol. This was silly and funny. Also I feel that this ws intended for a children's story? Very nice.
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I don't think there is anything wrong with the story. It is silly and cute. It also seemed though it would appeal more to younger folks. Look forward to reading and seeing other works. Thanks for entering
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Haha. That was really cute. It was kind of a mix between a poem and a story.
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It made me laugh. Nice story. I can really relate to Ruth. (evil laugh)
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haha this was hilarious. very cute and funny...but she had her first kid at age thirteen? okay then. they started early!
very nice
tay -
Welcome to StoryWrite
And thank you for your entry in the New Members contest.
I think that your story has a lot of potential. It is sort of a combination of sense and nonsense which is enjoyable. I think you should perhaps reconsider the way that you present her as being only 8. Especially since they have all those kids in 5 years which would make her only 13. Perhaps you should include Skipo being 9 or something and increase the timeline for all those children to 10 years later or something similar.
I sort of like the invention of Ragoo
Best of luck in the contest
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You have a funny and cute little story here, but I found it a bit redundant with the "later that day...." and "the next day..."
Good work, Keep it up.
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Funny !
This title caught my attention over all the others and I'm glad I decided to check it out! I really like the way the guy is dressed, and long dark hair sounds like a winner to me Best wishes in the contest!
beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 4.
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He was pretty strange, but Radafellia didn’t think so. [maybe, Some might think he was pretty strange, but Radafellia didn't think so.]
umm.. do you like wana [wanna]
Has a sing song quality to it. Almost a poem, not quite a story type thing. Really fun to read!
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I like how Skipo is dressed at the beginning, and I think it's a little disturbing that the girl was only eight years old. A very clever story. Good luck in the contest.
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of course, because everyone wants a pair of rubber, sented sandals!
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This was cute, but when characters are talking you should make a new paragraph.
Good luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
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:D Hey Katie! :D
Ragu is actually how it is spelled, but that's okay. It was an Italian sauce my mom used to buy for some of our meals! GO RAGOO!beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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no taylor! ragu is spaghetti sauce prnounced Raague, i thought ragoo was something different
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