I am building a sand castle out on the beach
Up on the shore where the tide will not reach
You may call me a dreamer, but I am not sad
And when I finish, the castle's not bad1
I am making a chamber that looks out on the sea
I build it there for my lady and me
I have made a drawbridge and I'm making a moat
Before that a maze to make us remote2
I can make me a castle
But I'm still alone
'Cause I can't make a woman
To make it a home3
I have made a courtyard where our children can play
There's a game room when it's rainy and gray
But there won't be a dungeon for I am not cruel
My people love me for the way that I rule4
I can make me a castle
But I'm still alone
'Cause I can't make a woman
To make it a home5
Now the clouds are beginning to gather above
They're going to ruin the dream that I love
Now there goes the thunder it's starting to rain
But come tomorrow I'll build it again6
I can make me a castle
But I'm still alone
'Cause I can't make a woman
To make it a home7
I am building a sand castle out on the beach
Up on the shore where the tide will not reach
You may call me a dreamer, but I am not sad
And when I finish, the castle's not bad8
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Author notes
I'll be posting this song on the internet, but until I have, I can email you an mp3 file if you wish to listen to this song or download it.
Andy
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A contest entry
- A song story thingy ma bober...r... by kkz2343.
170 points, ended February 22, 2007, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Silver trophy winner
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300 points, ended November 26, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
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170 points, ended January 30, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - poems by Para Turkey.
110 points, ended July 16, 10 entries
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Wonderful Andy! A great poem and I'm sure song (I'll listen to the mp3 if you want to e-mail it to me) I like the playfulness in it but also the loneliness and empty feeling of the castle. One thing though... no dungeon? That's just so not you.
Nice work!
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Hi Toni!
I've got a dungeon in my imaginary mansion
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I wrote songs for years. Not a lot, when you take thirty nine years into consideration, but I've got around a hundred songs that I feel have potential.
Thanks for stopping by, reading, commenting, and all the applause. If you email is on your page, I'll have 'Sand Castle' on its way, shortly. If not, I'll need your email.
Andy
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its a great poem it had good flow to it good luck
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Hello again, BT!
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like my poem. Was it the kind of emotion you were wanting?
Andy
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This is an AEWSOME poem! It flowed really nicely and it was very sweet. Thank you for entering and welcome to the finalist list
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Hi Jalice!
These are actually lyrics, but as such, they are also poetic verse. If you'd like I can email you an mp3 of the lyrics being performed in a song, guitar and vocal.
I'm very glad that this has made the finalists.
Andy
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I had a feeling they might be lyrics because it felt like I was listening to a song whilst reading it. Still they are very poetic as you said
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That is sooooo awesome!!!!!!! I love this poem good luck andy!
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Hello again!
I'm quite pleased that you love this poem. These are actually lyrics to a song I've written. If you'd like to hear it. I can email an mp3 to you.
Thanks for hosting.
Andy
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sweet. I love this. I love the picture. I love how creative of a write this is. thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest. And thanks for following the rule of it had to have won Gold. Great job.
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Hi Trekkergirl!
These are acutally lyrics to a song I have recorded, vocal and guitar. I had it on the net, but the site it was on was apparently taken over by another site and it seems that my account has not transferred. If you'd like to hear it, I can email an mp3 of it.
I always try to follow the rules, but I've been known to miss some
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Thanks for hosting, reading, and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like this song.
Andy
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Awww it's sad! Well, some of it. The other bits are happy (:
I really like this, but maybe make it abit more happy ? Other than that, I love it!
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Hi!
The person in these lyrics is happy in his dream world. There is a touch of sadness, but it is filled throughout with hope.
Andy
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i liekd this, it had a dark element
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like these lyrics.
Andy
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This is genious.
Who ever is in that picture is beautiful.
And this poem is magnificent.
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Thank You!
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm very pleased that you like these lyrics.
May you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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awww. I like that. It's a simple poem, yet the whole 'loneliness' aspect is well represented. great job. Very nice.
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Thanks Megan
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm glad that you like these lyrics. This is about a hopeless dreamer and romantic.
I hope you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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this was good. nice flow, but simple rhymes.
favorite line:
I can make me a castle
But I'm still alone
'Cause I can't make a woman
To make it a home8
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it. Simple rhymes, true; but it makes a good song. I hope you had many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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Mr. Stephenson, ...*shakes head*... this poem is fantastic.
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Thanks
Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm glad that you like this poem/song. I see you are an Andrew, do you go by Andy?
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I go by Andy sometimes. It really depends on who's calling me.
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loved it I adore the idea of creating a dream home out of a sand castle. Everythings perfect in the castle, then it rains and its ruined. The next day go back and create another one. Such a great poem, it rhymed and flowed perfectly.
Thanks for entering my contest
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm glad that you like this poem. It is actually a song that I wrote.
I hope you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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I absolutely love this song! The words are so genuine and the rhymes aren't forced at all. I only wish I could do the same!
I actually listened to the recording and STILL liked it. It seems like one of those songs where the words speak to each person individually and mean something more than they say. Did I mention these songs get stuck in my head?
AMAZING!
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Thanks
I'm very pleased that you like this song so much. I hope, if the song gets stuck in your head, that you'll still like it Some songs seems to come naturally. This song was like that. Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it.
Andy
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Cool.
Good job, I wuld love something like this from everyone, and i would sure like to chat with you about the music you made(if that really was you).But I'm sure it was,lol.
Keep on Writing!!!
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Thanks
I'm very glad you like these lyrics. Were you able to hear the song? Yes, I wrote and performed this song. I'd be happy to chat about this or any of the songs I've written. Do you write songs?
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and applauding. I appreciate it. I hope you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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Wow! This poem is amazing! I loved the theme, and it had great rhyme and rhythm! I am definetly going to keep an eye on this one for the win! Great job!
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Thanks
I'm very pleased that you like these lyrics. I tried to catch the essence of dreaming about the perfect mate. I hope you have many good entries and much fun. Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.
Andy
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wow...really good, nice imagery and beautiful write indeed! good luck....
some places could do a little construction...somewhere, the lines are hard to read as a poem, ya noe...
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. As a song, these lyrics work really well. Lyrics, while poetry, work better when played with music. I hope you enjoyed all the entries.
Andy
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Really nice!
I like this alot. I haven't heard the actual song, but it reads really well as a poem all on it's own too. Flows along nicely. Very pleasant reading.
Nice job!
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Thanks
Thanks for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. If you have Windows Media Player, you should be able to hear it at the link in the author's comments. I'm glad that you like these lyrics.
Andy
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awww that was so cute and sweet... yet sad. first set of lyrics i have read on here that arent my own... thats awesome. it is very hard to write a song with lyrics that are meaningful and not just a mix of random words and sentences that rhyme... but you have done it. your rhyming was great; not forced. i really liked that, thanks for entering!! =D
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. I may be best at songwriting, although now I write mostly stories. Anyway, I am very pleased that you like this song.
Andy
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It was so sweet, I was reading it out to Prince and telling him how much I liked it. well done and good luck in my contest.
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Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. These are lyrics to a song. If you have Windows, it should play for you at this link and you can hear it:
http://media.putfile.com/Sand-Castle
Andy
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very good, you show your talent as a songwriter here, one of your strong points I can never work out where to place the refrain nice...
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Thanks
I was really just trying to show you the picture, but thanks for reading the song. I may post this one on the net before long. It is one of my favorite songs, but I have a lot of favorites. It also has an instrumental riff.
Andy
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I totally love this song. At first I didn't get were the whole sand castle thing was going, but it went straight up tio the sky!!
I LUV THIS SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HEHEHEHEHEHEHEHEH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I'm fine.
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Thanks, kkz2343
I am very pleased that you like this song so much. I can send it to you on cassette if you like. I have some songs on line. If you would like to check them out, I can give you the link.
Andy
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A really really good one!
Could actually be a great song, and makes for a great poem as well!
Very well done!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 2, characters: 4.
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Thanks, Drac
Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause. This is a song. At this point, it is not on the net. I am glad that you like it. It is an entry for a contest.
Andy
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That was really cool. I liked it a lot. I like making sand castles, but what I liked about this is you used imagry (once again i cant spell)to make it sound like you could actually live in the castle. *stands and claps*
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Thanks, Vail
Thanks for the standing ovation and the applause. This is a song, but the song itself is not posted on the net. I do have some songs on the net. If you would like the link, I can give it to you and you can listen to some of them.
Andy
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Well this just blew me away. I just love the imagery of it all, the sad ballad effect goes well with what it's all about.
Only thing missing is the period costumes.
I thought how much it sounded more like a song than a poem, got to the bottom and sure enough, contest material! I can't see it NOT doing well in the contest! Good luck, I'll be watching!
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Thanks, Wolf Walker
I have this song on cassette if you would like to hear it and some of my other songs. At this time I do not have it on CD. If you would like to hear some of the songs I have on the net, I will give you the link.
Andy
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