I want to swim away but dont know how. falling into the ocean of deep blue salty sea. Stop and think about what your life would be if you were a fish. Deep deep into the ocean where you never have to come up to get some air. Swimming with the fishes laying on top of the ocean like a giant wet blanket. Play with the sea animals live your life into the ocean. Be away from it all. Citys, people just be free among the water in a peaceful enviorment . Thats all we can do right now is wish we can live with the fish. So next time you stop to smell the roses think about what your life would be like into the ocean.
A contest entry
- ALL FANTASY STORIES COME!! by Yo-Amoro-Tu.
160 points, ended March 27, 2007, 19 entries
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I love this story! Even though it was short, I still loved it! I can just tell by the title that it is a good story, and this one had a catchy title.
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ok?
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very nice and discriptive...holy poop
beginning: 2, language: 3, plot: 1, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 1.
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Hm. A curious thought, but the story is too short. You should expand it a bit, turn it into a more drawing adventure that pulls readers into what you're really trying to say. The images are mild at best, I'd suggest describing things more in depth. This would make a good starting idea, but there is a lot that could be done to it to turn it into a great story.
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you have chosen a really well-said topic and stuck with it. well-done!!!!!!!!!!!!!!^_^
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