EFFORT mind Vs. concience ( script )

Setting: in a slumped over body that is sleeping on a math test.

Concience: What are you doing wake up!

Mind: No sleep you are tired.

Concience: Do you want to take this class all over in summer school?

Mind: Don't listen to that whisper in your head, you failed the first semester so you are going to have to re-take this class in summer school anyway.

Concience: Sure you failed the first semester, but isn't better to make up one semester instead of two?

Mind: It might be easier, but think for a second listen to me you could always take this class all over again next year.

Concience: Don't listen to that thinker he is just trying to get you to slack off so he doesn't have to work.

Mind: I'm arguing with you aren't I; so I'm working.

Concience: Wake up kid this is already your second time taking this class, do you really want to make it your third?

Mind: If you take this class in summer school you will be taking this class for your the third time anyway and you will also be wasting your summer so just take it again next year.

Concience: Mind you really need to shut up so I can wake this kid up him falling asleep in math is already effecting you; If she did good this semester she would only have to make up one semester, so over all she would have only taken this class two and a half years not three.

Mind: So it is just one semester which would be easier if it was done next year following the first, instead of being done in summer school following nothing.

Concience: So It is easier to spend six weeks in the summer than a whole other year.

Mind: Well what if Rip Van Winkle said,"No thank you I think I'll sleep tomorrow.

Concience: Well Issac Newton didn't give up on gravity so let me wake this kid up.

Mind: Please he came up with the fig newton, hense the last part Newton.

Concience: Wow you really are getting stupid mind.

Mind: I am not.

Concience: Prove it, what is two plus two?

Mind: Ahh...fish?

Concience: KID WAKE UP!!!

Mind: she can't hear you concience because I am active in her mind right now. You are just the voice that annoys her.

Concience: Well then I guess I will just have to annoy you until I get my way.

Mind: Well you already annoy me, but you aren't going to get your way.

Concience: Want to bet?

Mind: Sure what are the terms?

Concience: If I win I get to wake this kid up.

Mind: Okay but if I win you shut up and let this kid sleep the rest of the year and repeat this class.

Concience: Deal.

Mind: What should the challenge be?

Concience: I don't know you are the mind not me.

Mind: But you are the responsible one.

Concience: Oh now I'm the responsible one I thought I was just the little whisper that annoys you all day long.

Mind: Not just in the day you sleep whisper too.

Concience: What you insilent little fool.

Mind: Don't deny it you know it's true.

Concience: Why I otta ... well actually I do whisper in my sub-concious.

Mind: Ah ha you see so why did you even try denying it?

Concience: I'm a concience that is what I'm supposed to do; make big decisions.

Mind: Big decisions you don't have a mind to process them; all you do is come up with silly little ideas and hand them over to me to put an ok or nay on them.

Concience: That's it the deal is off; KID WAKE UP THIS INSTANT.

Mind: SLEEP KID YOU ARE TIRED JUST SLEEP.

Concience: Will you stop that.

Mind: No I don't have to.

Concience: Stop it.

Mind: Make me.

Concience: I can't.

Mind: See you work under me I am your superior.

Concience: Well then you are a lousy boss.

Mind: Prove it wise guy.

Concience: Ah so you admit that I am wiser and smarter than you.

Mind: No I don't you tricked me.

Concience: Well maybe if you were smarter , which would happen if you let me wake this kid up, you wouldn't fall for my tricks.

Mind: Well maybe if you were dumber you wouldn't play tricks.

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this will get longer as my mind debates this out for me

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  • LittleKt
    April 26, 2007

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    that was realy funny, but twards the end i think you got a little off topic. but its a good story great job!

  • MDavid
    March 22, 2007

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    A mind is a terrible thing to waste and I don't mind telling you that this is a good premise for a story, but the arguement goes on too long and I would have lost my mind long before the end. Thanks for entering.


  • Hopeh
    March 4, 2007
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    It was funny...but it would of been even funnier if it was longer. Good Luck

  • Kitzwa
    February 25, 2007

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    I was kind of disappointed that it didn't have an ending. I really hope you extend it because it could really be good. Has quite a few punctuation errors though. And doesn't 2+2=Fish come from Fairly Oddparents or something, I swear I've heard of it before. Anyway, great job.

    • Night-Rink
      February 25, 2007
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      i haven't though of a way to end it because i t isn't fiction and i'm still debating on whether or not to just repeat the class


  • Dirty and Broken
    February 19, 2007
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    i am laughing so hard i am about to fall out of my chair...
    very good...


  • Thwack
    February 12, 2007

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    I was hoping you were going to extend this, but it was fun reading anyway. I liked the idea and I kept thinking of a possible interchange between a person's Id and Superego with the sleeping student being the Ego (from Freud). Thanks for submitting this.


  • Rocky Balboa
    February 5, 2007
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    Not Bad, Interesting, but it would be good if you could extend it.

    Not bad.

    beginning: 1, language: 2, plot: 5, ending: 2, dialog: 3, characters: 4.

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