With this incurable death
Cruel, slow, and deadly
Excruciating pain comes
Spreading its fingers all around
Taking a tight grip on my heart
My blood twining with Cancer
Choking me deep inside
Your words a catalyst to this
this horrible illness
Your death couldn't kill it
Because it is planted deep inside
Deep, deep inside of my body
Untouchable by everyone but you
Incessant with its progress
Feeding off of my heart and mind
Haunting my feelings down
Engraving a lasting mark
Consuming all part of me
Careless with its strong power
Engulfing me as whole
I'm lost for you as Cancer spreads
Author notes
Wrote this in between rounds at a forensics competition [no, I didn't place]
Daisuke is a happy bunny
A contest entry
- I'm bored. ...Are you? by Taylor Renee.
350 points, ended July 26, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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oh....this was very emotional and beautiful! amazing! i liekd it alot! good job! thnc for entering!
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I think this was a wonderful poem, packed full of emotion and very sad.
cancer is a horrible thing, and I'm actually glad to read something about the feelings having to do with it.
loved this.
Great job, thanks for entering and good luck!!!
xoox
Tay
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Enjoyable
Although I didn't really get the mood of this poem I sitll found it thoroughly enjoyable.
Good use of words, I particularly liked the lines:
"Engraving a lasting mark
Consuming all part of me"
Very vivid.
Great work.
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This is really relatable, I think that many people have had a situation where they felt like this and you wrote about it beautifuly.
Really good job.
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