I Wonder...

When I first entered high school
It appeared to me very strange
Very different from my other schools
Man! Was that a change!

And as the days have gone by
I've made a heap of friends
But I have my share of enemies
Whom I call my fiends

But one of my friends stand out
Like a hotdog on a bun
Not for long I've known her
But I think that she's 'The One'
No, not 'The One' you think of
When you hear me say that phrase
Just a friend I like to talk to
Each and every day

Yet, I wonder if she likes me
As much as I do her
Tried to tell, I have so many times
But the right moment has yet to occur
While her friends have tried to help me
Delivering messages from Point A to Point B
Yet to mention them, she has
Being it her or being it me

Find some other way, I shall
To get my feelings from I to she
For she's a one of a kind lady
Whom I hope likes me for me

"Tú eres la chica mejor mirando"
As I know you've read before
And as ever time progresses
I mean it more and more
And the feelings that I hold inside will emerge from me one day
But before that day arises, I'd surely like to say
Having you as a friend has been a real treasure
Bestowing unto me a love without a definite measure

I wonder if the day will come
When I will finally say
"Girl, I really like you, so answer me you may"
And the answer that she gives to me will not be just too snappy
Only two answers are possible
One of which will make me happy

So as I close this out, I would like to say to you
I really, really like you,and I hope you like me too
And like the movie "Star Wars:Revenge of the Sith"
That's right, I'm talking to you, the one and only Jamika Smith

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  • Le Masquerade silver member
    July 14
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    Awesome! It was really sweet how you described her friendship. The only part I didn't understand was-

    'And like the movie "Star Wars:Revenge of the Sith"
    That's right, I'm talking to you, the one and only Jamika Smith'

    I'm not sure what that was supposed to mean but I liked the rest of the poem. Thanx for entering and good luck


  • EphemeralStyle
    January 22, 2008

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    Some of the rhyming here seems forced... especially the 'Star Wars' line, which has nothing to do with the rest of the poem. Still, it's a sweet little write and I like your work. Keep penning!

    Eph

  • Myeisha
    December 2, 2007

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    Cool!!!

    This is so unique,this is the first time I've came across something like this. good job!!
    Thanks for entering!!

    keep on writing!!

  • belowit
    June 7, 2007

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    interesting. but it needs some work. when you write a poem you have to be careful to count the syllables otherwise the rythme won't be right.
    this was ok


  • passion29
    May 29, 2007

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    really good!

    you have a certain finesse and flair that is truly unique. i envy your poetry skills! haha but ya, keep it up because you actually really have talent. and you really captured such real emotions and stuff. i likey!


  • iPoopAThug
    April 24, 2007

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    ha

    ha did you comment on your own poem. Thats really funny. This is a pretty nice closeness poem thingy. I gotta say though... did you put that comment to make it obvious to Jamika that you like her?


  • bakermiddle
    March 11, 2007

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    Andrew

    This is a good poem even though it's clearly directed to this girl Jamika whom you seem to like. Have you told her how you feel or have you showed her this poem?

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

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