love poem

I love you
It's as simple as that
But it's beyond that
It's more than holding your hand
Or giving you a kiss goodnight

Picture the world's greatest writer
With the pen of an angel
Pouring all his love into one single poem
That poem would not describe how I feel about you

It's beyond making the day brighter
Just by giving me a smile.
I love you beyond reason
Beyond thought
Beyond emotion
I love you more than even saying I love you
Because how I feel about you
Is indescribable.

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  • Asfand
    July 11, 2007

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    oh my god! oh bless you gurl!! i had no idea you wrote this! taylor you've been keepin your talents gurl! if i knew this was you i would have pestered you to tell me how you wrote this all ur life!!

    U ROCK!!!


  • Veritaserum
    July 8, 2007

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    Beautiful...

    I love it when guys write sensitive poetry like this! Shows me they're not all bad after all. lol


  • I Dare to Dream
    July 3, 2007

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    Tell your friend that if he thinks THIS sux he shouldn't be writing. What's the fun if you don't realize the beauty of your works! Good luck in the um... loads of contests you entered!

  • Asfand
    June 28, 2007
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    awwww.....thats sooo sweet!!! its cute and adorable........i really enjoyed it........ it does seem very powerful...........and thats really great!!! ur wording and the way u described ur love really shows how much strenght and faith u actually have in ur love too!!!!

    this was very gud..........

    CRITICISM

    there is too much description and much less vagueness.......i dont find anything that boggles my mind and tells me to solve the puzzle and find the hidden piece of wisdom.........

    ya gotta have this ambiguity that allows me to interpret the meaning in the verses........

    apart from that......this was awesome!! simply beautful.......lovely and powerful!!!

    thnx for entering the contest and gud luk!!!

    CHEERS!!!


  • Leelee bug
    February 19, 2007
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    GOOD

    YOU SHOULD TELL YOUR FRIEND HE'S WRONG BCUZ THIS POEM IS AMZING!!!!!!!


  • Night-Rink
    February 5, 2007
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    sweet

    I love this absolutely love this. I'd love to know who it was written for.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Seachelle
    February 4, 2007
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    Ummm...

    Yeah, the idea of how much the person loves someone is great, but the way the poem was written just wasn't that good. I'm sure the person who was supposed to recieve it would love it...But I don't know, It was okay.


  • Near
    February 2, 2007
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    I like it. It's a good idea


  • Token Massacre silver member
    February 2, 2007
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    the idea of it is really good. some of the lines are repetitive and unnecessary, a little editing and he might feel better about it. nothing major, but it'll improve the flow of the poem itself. Good work though.

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