You told me that it was me
You told her it was her
You will never have a life if you
keep playing with peoples heads
Why do you do this you make people
Think you are the victim when they really are
This is why you will never be happy this is why
You will never have a life and this is why
people play with your head
Please tell me what you think
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true is it
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very good!
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Was this based off experiance?
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So this is why!
I always wondered.
By the way...is this a poem?
Meter...rhyme...form...image...music...grace?
Does this follow in the footsteps of Keats...Browning...Burns...Wordsworth...Frost
Actually...what IS this?
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oops, I forgot something! your applauds!
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Wow, really good, I love it. You went straight to the point, and wrote it in such a way that anyone will know exactly what you're talking about.
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leolord5235
This is an excellent story. We talk about bullying in class. This is a great example of bullying.
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COOOL,COOL, I LIKE IT.
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easy to realate to, well done, great flow. short but straight to the point.
Well done
Em
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Interesting...
I know of some people that are like this...I find it to be very disturbing. There are some people that can manipulate so good that their words can become yours. The protagonist in this piece sees that, at least, and isn't easily manipulated. Good job. -
realistic and goooood , i like!
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nice
yeah, i can apply that to some people, nice work!
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Very simplistic, but to the point. I absolutly loved it.
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woah! this is simple, straight to the point..very easy to understand..and yet very deep. it's hard to describe why this is awesome...it just is.....
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wowowowwowowwwwwwwww
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This was very cool! I like the way that you played with word a bit on the first lines.
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Wowo
This was really good
Lady Madeline -
WOW
What a great write I really enjoyed the whole thing. Godd job it was great.Good write. I think you got the point across LOL May I ask...what it was that inspired you to write this, or perhaps who was it written for? If no one, I find it a great talent to write with emotions that one is not feeling. BRAVO and keep penning.WoW
i think that you are really trying to write this good and you did yay.Hmm... players are quite the same. It's a bit hard to trust after one has been with a player for too long I like this, because this poem holds that which I DO want to ask the players that walked in my life btw.. uh, I am suggesting that you change the color of the background or the font (it's a bit painful to the eyes.. or it may just be my eyes ^_^) Thank you for this, Eva. liked this a lot of people would agree with u i no i do great job keep it up
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What a great write I really enjoyed the whole thing. Godd job it was great.Good write. I think you got the point across LOL May I ask...what it was that inspired you to write this, or perhaps who was it written for? If no one, I find it a great talent to write with emotions that one is not feeling. BRAVO and keep penning.WoW
i think that you are really trying to write this good and you did yay.Hmm... players are quite the same. It's a bit hard to trust after one has been with a player for too long I like this, because this poem holds that which I DO want to ask the players that walked in my life btw.. uh, I am suggesting that you change the color of the background or the font (it's a bit painful to the eyes.. or it may just be my eyes ^_^) Thank you for this, Eva. liked this a lot of people would agree with u i no i do great job keep it up
L C Cary
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Wow
What a great write I really enjoyed the whole thing. Godd job it was great
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Good write. I think you got the point across LOL May I ask...what it was that inspired you to write this, or perhaps who was it written for? If no one, I find it a great talent to write with emotions that one is not feeling. BRAVO and keep penning
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WoW
i think that you are really trying to write this good and you did yay
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Hmm... players are quite the same. It's a bit hard to trust after one has been with a player for too long I like this, because this poem holds that which I DO want to ask the players that walked in my life
btw.. uh, I am suggesting that you change the color of the background or the font (it's a bit painful to the eyes.. or it may just be my eyes ^_^) Thank you for this, Eva
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