the Story of Leah

I WOULD LIKE TO WRITE A STORY ABOUT A LITTLE GIRL I KNEW WHEN SHE WAS ABOUT EIGHT YRS. OLD. I KNEW HER BEFORE THEN, BUT THESE ARE THE CLEAREST MEMORIES I HAVE OF HER, SO I"LL BEGIN THERE, AND FILL IN WHAT I CAN WHEN THE THOUGHTS ARRIVE. SHE WAS A PRETTY LITTLE GIRL, HER NAME WAS LEAH. SHE HAD BLONDE HAIR, BLUE EYES, AND A CUTE LITTLE PUG NOSE. SHE WAS FASCINATED WITH LIFE, AND A LITTLE TOMBOY. SHE LOVED TO RUN AROUND BAREFOOTED, AND CLIMB TREES,PLAY IN THE DIRT, AND MOST OF HER LITTLE FRIENDS WERE USUALLY BOYS. BUT LEAH ALSO LIKED TO PLAY WITH HER DOLLS, AND HER MOTHER BOUGHT HER SEVERAL OF HER FAVORITES, AND SHE WOULD PLAY MAKE BELIEVE FOR HOURS, PRETENDING THAT THEY WERE REAL,AND SHE WAS THE MOTHER. IT WAS ONE OF HER FAVORITE PAST TIMES, AND SHE ALWAYS KNEW THAT SOMEDAY, SHE WOULD MAKE HER DREAMS COME TRUE, WITH A FAMILY OF HER OWN. ALL IN ALL SHE WAS A PRETTY AVERAGE YOUNGSTER, AND HAD HER GOOD AND BAD DAYS AS ALL KIDS DO. BUT THERE SEEMED TO BE AN UNDERLING PROBLEM WITH LEAH, NOT THAT LEAH THOUGHT THERE WAS, BUT IT SEEMED EVERYONE ELSE DID. HER MOTHER WAS ALWAYS TAKING HER TO THE DOCTORS, AND SHRINKS AND THEY WOULD LOOK AT LEAH BUT NOT REALLY EVER SAY MUCH TO HER. AT THE TIME , I GUESS HER MOTHER HAD CONVINCED EVERYONE, THAT LEAH WAS NOT RIGHT IN THE HEAD, AND THE MOTHER SIMPLY COULDNT HANDLE HER ANYMORE. LEAH COULDNT IMAGINE WHAT SHE HAD DONE SO WRONG, BUT SHE KNEW SHE HAD TO BE DIFFERENT, BECAUSE IF HER MOTHER WAS SAYING IT AND THE DOCTORS WERE SAYING IT , THEN IT MUST BE TRUE. LEAH WAS CRUSHED, HER LITTLE GIRL WORLD THAT SHE LOVED SO, WAS NOW TURNING INTO A NIGHTMARE, FROM WHICH SHE WAS ENTERING AND COULD NOT ESCAPE. THE DOCTORS GAVE HER MOTHER PILLS FOR LEAH, WHICH IN TURN RENDERED LEAH COMPLETLY DOCILE, BECAUSE THEY COMPLETLY SHUT HER DOWN, SHE COULD"NT STAY AWAKE, AND THE ACTIVE, NORMAL LITTLE GIRL WAS NOW WALKING AROUND LIKE A ZOMBIE. LEAH HAD TWO SISTERS, ONE WAS ABOUT FIVE YEARS OLDER, AND THE OTHER FIVE YEARS YOUNGER, SO THAT MADE LEAH THE MIDDLE CHILD. HER OLDER SISTER ELLEN WOULD OFTEN BE LEFT AT HOME WITH THE TWO YOUNGER ONES TO BABYSIT, WHICH WE"LL DISCUSS IN MORE DETAIL LATER ON. GETTING BACK TO LEAH, SHE USE TO HATE GOING TO SCHOOL, SHE WAS NEVER VERY GOOD AT IT, HER MOTHER GAVE HER THE MEDICINE BEFORE SHE LEFT, OR RATHER INSTRUCTED HER TO TAKE THEM, BECAUSE MOST OF THE TIME THE GIRLS GOT UP BY THEMSELVES AND GOT THEMSELVES READY FOR SCHOOL ON THIER OWN, AS THE MOTHER WAS STILL SLEEPING BECAUSE SHE WAS TAKING SOME PILLS OF HER OWN AND SLEPT A GOOD DEAL OF THE TIME. LEAH DREADED GOING TO SCHOOL, SHE WAS ALWAYS TIRED AND FELL ASLEEP IN CLASS EVERYDAY. THE TEACHERS AND PRINCIPLE USE TO TAKES NOTES OF LEAH"S ACTIONS AND SEND THEM BACK AND FORTH TO THE PARENTS AND TO THE DOCTORS. IT WAS LIKE LEAH WAS UNDER CONSTANT SURVEILANCE, ALL BECAUSE HER MOTHER SAID SHE WAS TOO ACTIVE AND COULD"NT BE CONTROLLED, THUS ,THE REASON FOR THE PILLS. LEAH REPEATED THE THIRD GRADE AT LEAST THREE TIMES. LEAH BEGAN TO FEEL LIKE A FREAK, SHE WAS ALWAYS HEARING TALK OF HOW BAD SHE WAS AND THAT SHE WAS NOT RIGHT IN THE HEAD, AND EVERYTHING THE LITTLE GIRL USE TO BELIEVE HAD VANISHED IN THE WIND. IT WAS"NT LONG AFTER THAT HER OLDER SISTER WOULD RUN IN THE HOUSE SCREEMING THAT LEAH HAD BEEN KILLED, SHE HAD BEEN HIT BY A CAR IN FRONT OF THIER HOUSE AND WAS LAYING IN THE STREET.LEAH"S MOTHER RAN OUT AND SAW HER LITTLE GIRL LAYING THERE UNCONTIOUS. THE AMBULANCE CAME AND WISKED HER UP AND THEY WENT TO THE HOSPITOL WHERE LEAH LAY THERE DYING .(this is part one of this story)

i will submit part two very soon

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  • darkpaintedreams
    August 4, 2007
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    I like the idea of the story and where its going but like the others said, lower case and spelling would make it easier to read. But I shouldn't complain cause I suck at spelling. But anyways, other than that I really do like the idea of the story, maybe some more details would make it even better? Just ideas...well great job keep it up and I will read part two.


  • Blazing Writer
    February 22, 2007

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    This is pretty good and I agree with Frakie-Boy, use lower case letters too, it's pretty hard to read with all capital, and spell check is also good. But other than that. Good Job!

  • JustCallMeAngel
    February 21, 2007
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    I don't know what to say....if you are serious about writing...you might want to actually use lower cases and take the time to spell check. I don't want to sound overly critical but put a little effort into it please!