Inquisitive, Courageous, Wise
Those are the traits of the
Chosen One
Amara had seen a flash of flourescent green light as she opened her pantry door. This wasn't the first time this light showed. It started a few months ago but as her thirteenth birthday approached this event occured more and more often. She knew it wasn't just her eyes tricking her. She felt an unusual power about it. Like it was dent from someone or something much more powerful than anything in the real world.
As Amara was pondering about this mysterious light her mother Janeet Howell put her arm around Amara's shoulders startling her. "Amara what are you doing?" inquired Janeet looking worriedly at her daughter.
"Mummy you scared me! I was just getting some breakfeast." Amara replied picking an oatmeal packet as she walked into the kitchen. "Too bad it's dinnertime." Janeet said folding her arms.
"Mari, I'm starting to get worried about you. You've been acting so strange lately. You've been forgeting where you are, what time iy is and even who you are. Are you sure nothing's going on?" commented Janeet still frowning.
"Mummy I'm completely sure."replied Amara preferring not to tell her mother about the eerie events.
Amara and her siblings were born in Dover, England but they had recently moved to Florida which was the exact opposite of her hometown. They had moved due to Janeet's job which took her to America. Amara had dark brown hair that shone in the moonlight. Her caramel colored skin gave her a contrast to her bright green eyes. She was of medium height and was an excellent figure skater. She was a dreamer which often got her into trouble. She was the one her siblings came to advise them and sort out thier adversaries. She was superstituous as expected and believed she had an unknown power in her.
Amara's eldest sister, Janit, was a smart, yet boy crazy, teenager. Being seventeen, this was Janit's final year of required schooling. She had ebony hair as long as the sun is bright. She was very outgoing but could be clueless at times. Her bluish black eyes matched her eyelashes. Her long model like legs carried her gracefully along.She was someone who fit in everywhere she went and was admired for that trait.
Janit's twin Ilaine was the exact opposite of Janit. Ilaine may have looked exactly like her sister, but she had a completely different personality. Ilaine was a perfectionist, and despised chaos. She was extremely organized (too organized to Amara) and encourages her family to do likewise. Ilaine believed that logic could explain everything. She steered clear of fantasy and fairytales and more toward biographries and general information. Of course being a perfectionist often gave Ilaine a tendency for being bossy. She could be incredibly frustrating and the only person who could deal with her without blowing up was Janeet who was a generally calm person.
The last and youngest of the Howell family was Lily who was at the mere age of nine. Lily was the most sensitive of the Howells. She was easily angered and saddened but stayed mostly to herself. It was true Lily was incredibly shy and secretive but she did occasionally stand up for herself. She had short ebony hair accompanied with emerald green eyes ,as Amara. She was short for her age but was skinny. As all of the Howells, Lily had caramel colored skin.
As the other children of the Howells arrived home Amara became more and more hesitant of telling her family of the events.
A contest entry
- Do judge a book by its first page by darling dearest.
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Comments
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it's a good beginning, i'll be intrested to read the rest, because right now anything could happen, but you decribed your main character well.
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great
i loved it. and thank you for joining the group and sharing your storys. great story i loved it! -
wonderful intro Marrissa. I saw a mistake i forgot where. Iy isn't a word. Can't wait to read the rest. I still wonder how you're able to take your ideas and weave the words together and make an enchanting tale. I'm still trying and by trying I meant failing. You've read my stuff I just don't have your talent. Oh and good job.
beginning: 5, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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well i'm not finished with the chapter yet.
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Good beginning.
You have put out the first chapter well. It gives enough information to make further reading a desire. Will be interesting to see where you take this character with her powers.
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