For you I will
Give you anythang
For you I will
Hold your head up high
For you I will
Hug you and never let you go
For you I will
Kiss you till you say stop
For you I will
Not cry anymore
For you I will
I promise
Please tell me what you think
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Anythang?
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Thats sweet. You would be very loyal to him
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Nicley written
This poem is very good if a trifle soppy for my blokish tendancies.
The pace is great and the message is simply delivered.
Top poeming.
All the best.
jsdk.
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 3, ending: 4, characters: 2.
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For some reason, this poem really turned me into mush. Seriously. It was so sweet and well written, and since I started reading your stuff, I think I've learned to recognize your style. But this was truly beautiful, and displays the emotion of love wonderfully.
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aww i liked this great job eva
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Pretty
I like this. very good; i like the words. i kno, im not good at commenting. im not good at singling out my most thoughtful comments.
anyway, good job. keep it up.
~Dan Dan
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cute
it's so sweet, i love it. -
Wow this is great. very well written. great flow
well done
Em -
This was good but it kinda sounded like a song by some teeny popper guy whose name I cant remember.
It was really good though
Lady Madeline -
a wonderful little thought for anyone who cares about anyone else. some times, people have to be reminded that they are loved and that can make all the diffrence in the world! everything in this piece fit together nicely and had a nice rhythm about it when read out loud.
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oo, very sweet......
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Okay, spelling was almost perfect, the only thing I saw was in the 2nd line, it's anything not "anythang". It's got a nice message behind it too, it's something that people can relate to.
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