When I look to heaven above
I thank the good lord above for you
He put you here to make me happy
Thats just what you will do
I see your eyes looking at me
they are saying come with me
hold me close and never let me go
For you I will till we die
This is the day that you and I
Will take our lives to be with one another
It's the only way we can be happy with one another
Please tell me what you think
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I'm gonna cry! Seriously, I can't help but get teary eyed when I read your poems. I have to stop or you're gonna to make me melt!
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Sooo awesesome I need to be reading more of your stuff
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AWESOME
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A bright uplifting poem enjoyable to read.
Robert Davidson.
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 2, ending: 4, dialog: 1, characters: 5.
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this is really sweet, I'm really glad I read this. It ups my spirits this dismal morning.
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i like what rebel rebel said. i have to agree: we write what we feel. good write.
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ol this was very sweet i loved it eva awsome job
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Foundation for a Marriage.
Or else someone is living together. Smile.
We write what we feel. This creates our reality. We need to find out what the other thinks. If they do not think with us and agree with us then the Heaven we are building for ourselves and them is just a Hell for them and not Heaven at all.
I see a lot of one way literature. It has to be both ways in a relationship. We write out hearts out and when we do we represent only one side and the other is not in the story to give their side of it.
It is heartbreaking that throughout history men have made fools of themselves writing love poetry to women who only spurned them. Critics tell us that the writing said more about the men that it did for the love of the women. All is vanity. And unless two be agreed; they can not walk together.
Your work is taking on a finer look and your line spacing is neater on the page. You twist and turn words and sentences with your own style and this is a good thing. It makes us work to read you and every writer should be so employed.
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