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It’s night. Car headlights flash over us like strobe lights. The air is pure and clean, and every breath I take feels like confession, a release of some empty feeling. Tyson is talking about something, I’m not sure what. I’m just watching his animated face dance with his words. His hazel eyes, so dark under the streetlights, light up as they remember something funny that happened earlier. His dirty blond hair flops forward over his face, and I want to reach up and push it back for him. He moves his hand up over his cheek to scratch his nose and all I can think of is how I wish I could be that hand.
“Adam?” His voice comes back slowly, drifting in like the shore at summer. “Adam?” He calls my name again. He’s giving me a weird look. I can tell I’ve been staring at him, and he can too. Somehow, I don’t care anymore.
My hand dances along his arm, up to his shoulder, to his neck, landing on his cheek. My other fingers find his, and snake around them. He looks confused, as if he doesn’t know quite what to do. So I lean in, letting my tangled-up fears go to absolution. I press my lips against his, moving my hand round to the back of his head.
And at last, I have him.
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Comments
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Just so awesome. I can't even explain it better. So short, but so powerfully written. Keep it up! *whistles*
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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There better be more! I want to know what Tyson thinks. I love that name, Tyson. Actually, I like Adam too... But anyways, I want to read more. Is there more? Please IM me back and tell me. I gotta know his reaction. Thanks!!
~Kevan!~
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Its so short, && i want to know Tysons reaction...you cant just cut it off like that, lmao. Very nice writing descriptive, but if you are gonna make it that short maybe add more. I would love to read more of this so ummm, write more......please =]
Thanks for entering my contest, good luck and keep up the superb writing.
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Short and sweet.
It was well written, but it would be better if it continued a little bit.
Your description was amazing though. You could really imagine the scene. Was so well written.
I really liked the shortness. Well done and good luck.
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lol..thats it?..i was kinda hoping for more..but nevertheless..i didn't hate it..i thought it was sweet..great job
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Hay! well done! i like this alot! Thank you for entering it into my contest! Good luck!
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I like
It's easily one of your more thought out pieces - it's more magical and lyrical than the pieces you get more intense with.
I love, by the way.
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I liked this a lot. I sounded so perfect to me. Good job with this sand take care!
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Wow, it's in a lot of contests.
I loved it, Meggers!!! Can you pleaaaaaaase write more? Pleaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaase? *puppy eyes*
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yes, i like, and yes, i want more of it. lol. it's really great. I really love it.
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great job i liked it it was perfect to me i really enjoyed reading this so keep it up
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glad you thought so =]
megg♥
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Fantastic
I loved this. You had me hooked from the first sentence. I love how you describe the emotions and the longing, very insightful.
Good work.
beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading!
megg♥
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wow very good i liked this nice picec of work thank you for sharing this good job keep up the good work
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MMM this is lovely, its short though, i want more! Great description of emotion and a beautiful simplicity. Love the imagery, its really really beautiful, i can see the scene playing out before my eyes. Great spelling and use of grammar, this reads really well. Thanks heaps for entering, a great write.
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This was good. Great length. Good detail. It was easy to read and it was not too complicated. It was short and sweet...
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Uh, interesting. Good description with the characters feelings.
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good job (= good luck in the contest
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Aww hun this is so sweet...I love reading gay/bi/whatever poems & stories. it gives me hope that things like that can actually happen. Let me know when you've added on to this<333
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I will sweets. Thankyarr lotsly for the comment, I appreciate it.
Noise&&Kisses
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Aw...this is wonderful. It's so sweet;; I'm still actually smiling. You have such a way with words, doll. I hope you never cease to find inspiration ♥♥♥
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Thanks sweets. If my story made you smile, that comment made me so ecstaticly happy.. I loveyarr sweets.
Noise&&Kisses
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"I’m just watching his animated face dance with his words."
--I liked this line. Sometimes watching someone speak is the most captivating thing. I love to watch speech happen.
"I press my lips against his, moving my hand round to the back of his head."
--I can see this being played out in my mind.
It seems you are questioning if you should continue with this kind of story write (gay romance) but you can write anything and you know that.
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Thankyarr lots for your comment, it was really kinda of you =]
Loveyarr sweets.
Noise&&Kisses
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Beautiful
I love the detail, and the content.
beginning: 2, language: 2, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 4.
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Thank you lotsly. Would you want more, or...?
Noise&&Kisses
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Wonderful Story
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 2, ending: 4, dialog: 3, characters: 2.
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Thanks for your comment, glad you liked it. Would you like to read more? I just want to know, so I know who to message when I write the next part.
Noise&&Kisses
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I totally love this and I would love to have you continue this... I liked it so much that I'll look out for a continuation... *puppy eyes* plz continue it!!!
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I'll let you know if I do, which I probably will... Thanks for commenting =]
Noise&&Kisses
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YAY
I like your use of words...dunno, it just paints the picture soo vididly. I'd be on happy boy-scout if there were more *hinthint* lol,
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Lol I'll tell you if I write anymore, kay?
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YAYA!! lol, htanks..
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I like. *bobs head up and down* I like alot. You've got such beautifully descriptive words it just paints an amazing picture. Ohh.. I so hope you continue this.
*Gives most pitiful look possible*
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Lol, I'll try to. I'll tell you if I do.
Noise&&Kisses
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Intense
I love how Adam immerses himself in Tyson. Very intense and romantic.
beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, characters: 4.
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Thank you muchly =]
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Interesting story. Short, romantic, and nicely described. I like how the narrator lose themselves in the kind of trance that the Tyson guy puts them in. I thought the narrator was a girl until I read the note, heh. I was confused as to why he was calling him "Adam". Blonde moment? Anyway, good story.
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Thanks for your comment. Would you be interested in more?
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Bring him over to the Men on Men Group.
Am glad he has been got. All men need a good getting. You took an honest and easy approach. It is this simple when it comes down to it and ya either get them or they get away. Smile.
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Glad ya liked =]
Noise&&Kisses
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hey this is oddly good. you should do more with it like some background with "Adam" and the Mystery Person. hey could you be so kind as to read "Rewind?" thnx.
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Hey, thanks. So.. do you think I should write another part? And sure, I'll read =]
Noise&&Kisses
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it's very good, and i definatly think it should be continued.
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Thankyarrz =]
Noise&&Kisses
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