If you think you love me tell me
If you feel it show me
I need to no please
When you look in my eyes what do you see
When I look in yours I feel free and happy
I feel safe to say what I want to
To move in the ways I want to
To smile all the time never cry again
All these because of you
You did this to me Thank you
A contest entry
- I want allpoetry by Pudding-zilla.
100 points, ended April 13, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Poems! Love poems to be exact! by TeardropOnMyGuitar.
350 points, ended April 23, 2007, 10 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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I'm seriously running out of vocabulary! I can't seem to put to words what reading your poems make me feel. I can only describe it as a warm kinda fuzzy feeling, like cotton candy floating around in my stomach. Stupid I know, but bear with me!
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coool! it has a nice simpel rythem to it.
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cool
sweet, the whole rythm of the poem seemed a little off at times, and theres a couple spelling errors, but it was really cute
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Coolies
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awsome
i think its a really good story and i like itbeginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Now, this is really nice. A great display of emotion and the flow was good. You have an interesting way of writing and I like it. Good job!
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At first, because of the title, I thought this would be some kind of negative poem like "YOU MADE ME THIS WAY...WHY???" But it's not and it's a pleasant surprise, romantic, and lovely, and makes me wish I could have something like that. Sadly... But good job!
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I agree with all the comments. It's a very nice and touching little piece. Although, adding punctuation would add emphasis to it. But otherwise, good job!
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A lovely tribute to someone who has made a huge impact in your life. Keep writing!
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aw...
I love this its so sweet and wellwritten and I like the flow and the words. One mistake, you say "I need to no please" it should be "I need to know please"
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this is very beautiful
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You should add punctuation to this, it would add emphasis to what you're saying. I love the message although I find "to move the ways I want to" is somewhat vague. Otherwise good poem.
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it is sweet, but your lack of puntuation is confusing
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ah, to be in love again... ^_^ The beginning is very easy to relate with, since most of us want something that would guarantee the real scared emotion (which is love). Oftentimes, kindness or something else is mistaken for love...
Then again, for some people, to be loved in return is the only thing that they're looking for in life. After all, it is when our love is shared with another that we feel most alive - or rathre, that's what I think
I'm sure a lot of other people here would be able to relate with this poem. Thank you for this read
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ol this was really sweet and i love ya sexy mamma great job this was very good
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