2:46pm1
The taxi ride to the Royal Brisbane Hospital took only ten minutes but to the three friends it felt like a lifetime. They paid the driver $19.80 and piled out in front of the Emergency entrance.
“Prue said to ask for her booth at the nurse’s station.” Jane said, her voice shaking as she spoke.
The three of them walked through the sliding glass doors and into the stark hospital-blue waiting room. Rows of plastic chairs lined the walls and made aisles in the centre of the room, a child’s play pen with donated toys was set up in the far corner and a wall mounted TV was playing taped episodes of Seinfeld.
“Hi. Our friend, Prue Doherty was admitted a short while ago. Would you happen to know where she is?” Sebastian asked the nurse sitting at the reception.
The nurse typed away on her keyboard before answering. “Yes, she’s in Recovery up on the sixth floor. The elevators are to your right”
They all thanked her and hurried off to get an elevator that was already waiting at the bank.
3:01pm2
Prue saw her friends before they saw her. They were sitting in the waiting room in the hospital recovery section, all with worried looks on their faces. Sebastian was the first one of her friends to see her and hugged her half to death.
“Prue, what happened to you?” Lydia asked her, examining the split and swollen lip Prue sported as well as the numerous cuts and grazes that littered her face and arms. A large purple bruise was spreading over her left cheek.
Tears slowly slid down Prue’s face and she coughed before answering, holding her ribs as she did so. “I was mugged,” she said simply. “And me being who I am refused to give the son of a bitch my bag, so he got rough with me”
“Oh, Prue” Lydia said, bursting into tears.
Prue sighed and smiled at her. “Don’t cry for me, Lyd. I was stupid. I should’ve just given him my bag”
“We should go to the police, Prue,” Jane said. “You need to give a description of the prick that did this to you”
“No,” she said flatly. “I’m not going to”
“But why?” Lydia asked.
“Because, I would have to tell them why I wasn’t at school, I would have to tell my parents as well”
“What are you going to tell your parents what happened?” Sebastian asked.
Prue closed her eyes against a headache that was quickly forming. “I’m going to say I fell down the stairs at central station and nothing else,” she sighed. “Now, I just really want to go home”
“Ok, we’ll go talk to the nurse,” Sebastian said with uncertainty.He believed that Prue should tell the police what happened but it was Prue’s decision not to and he respected that.
The nurse got Pure and the doctor that attended to her when she first arrived to sign the release forms. It was over within ten minutes and the doctor walked them out to the main entrance. “Take it easy Ms Doherty. You are a very lucky girl,” he said to her whilst hailing a taxi.
Prue smiled. “You can say that again”3
Author notes
Hey, all! A twist to the tale! I tend to do that a lot! Lol. Oh, well. Now, there’s just one last thing to say…. THE END!
Please tell me what you think
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It sucks that its ended, but good job on it all!
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This was great, I liked the ending, I actually liked the bit where you say how much was paid for the taxi, i like little details like that...
Well done and good luck with all the new things you are yet to write!!
Ibius -
I like this, not how I would have expected it to end, well done.
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hmm. i see several areas where you could expand this, making it a longer series. but over all, damn great story. i would have commented at each part, but i was enjoying it way to much.
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this is nice 'real time' : elapsed ll minutes
from front to back this is the afterwards of a street crime, going from the intial reaction of worried friends entering the hospital to look for their friend, to friends trying to get her to report it to the police, and her convincing them that she would'nt consider it worth it, especially considering the fact that she was truant. for all the bruises, and all the nice little details in this story, i found it to be excellent reading. the story's ending is actually heartwarming: it reflects on the fact that she has a lot of caring friends, wasn't seriously injured, and gets to be a truant w/o a problem, plus she learns a little bit about herself. really nice work.
beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 3.
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Hey there! Thanks heaps for your comment!! Not many people like the ending...but I do, lol. It was meant to be one of those moments in life that alter the way you act and think. In this instance it was meant to be Prue realizing that she isn't invincible and that she needs to be more aware and down to earth instead of so free spirited. Thanks again for your comment!!
Shady Lane
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well, grrr....
not exactly the best ending, but...good, nevertheless -
Hmm, I liked that story.
Though this one was too short and I already miss it since it's now over.
Hmph.
But it was all really good!
=]
<3
Syd -
Lol that was good, I thought that a boyfriend had beaten her or something. That was really good.
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oh my gosh...
I thought she'd been hit by a car or something like that.
I'm glad she didn't die...
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