This is me

This is me not much
This is my body nothing great
This is my life sacry I no
This is my home what do you think
This is my Heart is it whole
This is my brain is it smart enough for you
I look down on my self should I
I can't help it being put down
What should I do I need your help tell me how I feel
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  • I Dare to Dream
    July 25, 2007
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    Beautifully sad!

  • Dinky Di
    January 25, 2007

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    ohh so true again! There's always people who will take advantage of openess and put us down, in turn our self esteem plummets. We as humans always look to someone else to help us/teach us/ be there for us. I could not have put this better myself. This is the message I got out of this poem... anyways good job!


  • TheRandomToaster
    January 24, 2007

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    This is a really good message. Take me or leave me.
    The wording is a little strange and in line 7 my self should be all one word.
    Good job though.


  • Dirty and Broken
    January 24, 2007
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    'scary' not 'sacry'
    this is good, and, though kind of confusing, i like it


  • strawberry26
    January 23, 2007

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    okay i liked this very great you should'nt put your self down u are very good at alot of things you do ol and you speeled scary wrong but you did a very great job and i love ya sexy mamma

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