Jacob Nathans had it all , a loving wife and mother ten year daughter. A very sexy and loving mistress and a job as a lawyer . There is nothing like being on top of the world for Jacob. Until a new case is given to him by a friend. However, Jacob thought something was strange when the next day his friend disappeared and everyone had not memory of him. Jacob was even starting to forget him.
The case was against a company called Genesis, a anonymous client was suing the company for the effect of something called Project: sleepwalker. The client refused to leave his name or anything. He said that it was safer for everyone, he would reveal himself on the day of the trial cause he felt Genesis could do nothing to him. Jacob decide to do some research on the company but soon finds that Genesis, is no regular company. With no past history or idea of what they produce the company just seemed to raise up over night.
That night as Jacob was on his way home, but in the darkness of the parking lot, a voice told him “Help me.” As Jacob turned he was faced with a little girl but soon his made went faint. The next day, everything changed for Jacob his name was now Gulliver “Gully” Carter, a single man trying to make it as a musician. Once admitted into a mental asylum after he lose touch with reality. With no memory, Jacob/Gulliver lives this new life until flashes of the past are sparked, people who he never met and never knew are starting to look familiar to him. Confused and lost Gulliver decides to confront these people but soon learns he knows everything about them but they know nothing about him.
He day gets worst when he gets a letter from someone called Anonymous asking him “to find Alice ” as well as telling him who he really is. There is something strange in Denmark. Gulliver must now find this Anonymous but he is not the only one. Can Jacob/Gulliver get through his doubts and fears about his sanity to see what is real or will this be the things that finally pushes him over the age.
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just something i thought about doing for a week, i wanted to post this up and see what kind of resonese it gets
Please tell me what you think
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I WANT MORE
YOU BETTER WRITE THIS BOOK YOU ARE SO TALENTED AND GIFTED GOD WAS WONDERFUL WHEN HE PUT THE WRITING INTO YOU AARON YOU BETTER TAKE IT AND RUN WITH THIS CUZ I WANT TO BUY THE FIRST COPY!!!!!!!!!!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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This is a very interesting idea for a story and I'm srue it's going to go interesting places, but the writing feels like a movie in fast forward mode. It would be great to get to know more about jacob, and to have more details about his situation.
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okay so when is part two coming up... this was great.. pulled you in from the start.. well done. i liked how he got the letter telling him who he used to be. starts to give him something to work on
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There were mistakes in this, but not noting those, this was a very good storyline. I hope you expand on because I would defenitely like to see where this goes. It looks like it'll be a wonderful and thrilling story. Keep up the good work. God Bless!
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Not sure if you wanted corrections at this point or not. If not, skim on past:
[mother ten year daughter] loving mother of a 10 yr old daughter or, loving mother, and a 10 yr old daughter.
[had not memory] had no memory
[company called Genesis, a ] Genesis. An anonymous
[that Genesis, is no regular company] that Genesis was not a regular company
[produce the company just seemed] produced
[home, but in the darkness of the parking lot, a voice told him “Help me.” ]home, a voice in the darkness of the parking lot implored or begged him. "Help me."
[little girl but soon his made went faint] mind?
[he lose touch] lost
[With no memory, Jacob/Gulliver lives] With no memories, J/G lived
[He day gets worst] ???
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The story has an interesting plot line. I can see if going several directions but the one that stands out for me is which is the real Jacob/Gully?
I think you should continue with this story and let it play out.
Waiting to see what happens next!
beginning: 5, language: 2, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 2, characters: 5.
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I like it because it confused me. ^_^ Then, it clicked and I understood it, I think. Good start.
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