Raven Part Nine

My door swings open and I attack all out.  Mr. Kristoph didn't expect me to have a weapon, and was too slow to react.  I stab him in the arm that's holding the hand gun, causing him to drop it.  As he falls to the floor, I think of nothing, other than getting away from my room and out of the house.  1

I run to the stairs, jump on the banister and slide down as fast as I can without falling.  When I near the bottom, I get my reflexes ready so I don't slip. I jump off the banister and slide to the front door.2

Already, I hear Mr. Kristoph coming.  His mental tones are terrifyingly angry.  I pull the front door open and dash out of the house, keeping watch for someone who could help me somehow.  I find the driveway and yard completely deserted.  3

"Hawk?" I ask mentally, panicking.4

"Raven, go around to the back," Hawk answers.5

I do so, tearing through a huge line of blackberry and sticker bushes to get there.  I am in so much pain, I wish to cry out, but I know better.  Even at this distance, I hear Mr. Kristoph running down the stairs and out the door to find me.  I still run, not caring where to.6

"I know where you are!" I hear Mr. Kristoph shout.7

Still I run.  I run strait into my sister's arms.  From behind her, Aidan takes the dagger from my ice cold hands.  I do nothing to protest, know that I was safe for now.8

Mr. Kristoph comes thundering from the back door, the hand pistol ready to shoot.  Luckily, Aidan was ready and dodged the bullets in the same manner as I did, as they whizzed past him.  Hawk took me and hid behind the car.  9

Unfortunately, Hawk is too slow, and Mr. Kristoph shoots me in the chest... Just inches from my heart.  The pain is almost unbeareble.  My breathing speeds up as the bullet wedges between two of my ribs, piercing my left lung.10

From what I hear then, Aidan must've struck at him, because I heard Mr. Kristoph yell really loud.  At that very moment, I feel rain drops then pass out from pain.11

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Da da dumb! Really, it's dumb!

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  • -Heather-
    April 18, 2004
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    the story is greAt now on to a 10 and then last number 11 and you are the best in the woirld.
    u really do mean it.i agree with kissmysock never ever again say your work is stupid.
    heather lilcu


  • April 18, 2004
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    It is not dumb, I forbid you from calling your work dumb ever again

    The story is great, and it's coming together nicely. I am enjoying it.

    - Sock

  • lifes torment
    April 18, 2004
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    ahhh...now im all better for tonight..lol. butcha gotta write more soon! =)
    -kayla=/