Her hand gripped the scratch ‘n’ win card tightly. Two moon symbols had already been uncovered; one more and one hundred thousand dollars would be hers. The wind blew gently at her hair casting it across her forehead. The shiny twenty cent coin hovered above the card shining like a piece of silver, waiting to scratch away the thin layer of paint that covered her fortune. The woman crossed her fingers, bit her lip and closed her eyes. She lowered the coin onto the card and they clashed. It was only a small jolt, but to the lady, it could have been an earthquake. She rubbed her fingers of the coin, feeling the indents that had been stamped into it by some machine far off. With one last glimpse at the card she closed her eyes and began to scratch, slowly at first but speeding up. She scratched away all the paint and slowly opened her eyes. And burst out in tears, for on the scratch ‘n’ win card, printed so perfectly, was a picture of a moon.
A contest entry
- OptionsOptionsOptions..please? by ohemeegeeay.
100 points, ended February 10, 2007, 10 entries
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Pretty good
I think that this story is quite good but it needs more detail but I really want to know what happens next. Please can you write a bit more metcher.and also what is the lady's name? Why does she need the money. or does she just want to be rich?
Lots and lots af questions...beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 3, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 1.
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I'm guessing option one? This was good, but it could have been better... more detail, like why does she need the money so badly? Where is she? Who is she? Just stuff like that. However, the description was really good.
Thanks for entering, and good luck!
Noise&&Kisses
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