Snow1
Insanity, brought on by thoughts of you2
Makes me surrender and forces me to beg3
Crystiline lakes run down my cheeks4
The only emotion I usually show publically about you.5
Yet still, I plow on, arms out6
All I want to be is with you.7
But,8
Too late, 9
All chances of that ever happening are long gone, and now I'm down10
On my knees, there's vomit on the ground11
My eyes are bloodshot, my body gaping,12
Full of desperate attempts to carve and cut you out.13
The blood is like snowdrops at first, but then14
They grow heavy with my heartfelt ''lovesick'' memories.15
They splatter like red snow on my legs, crying over16
All the scars I have aleady down for you, as if to say;17
All this insanity has been brought on by you.18
My mouth won't stop opening and my arms are shaking19
My eyes won't close and I start screaming.20
My Blood is like snow21
On every night22
That I've tried to kill myself23
Just because of you.24
Maybe it'll snow again tonight.
Author notes
C. As far as I can recall, I wrote this when I was 15, and to my ex Abi.
A contest entry
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100 points, ended December 15, 2007, 20 entries
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Comments
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So sad...but lovely.
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oh very depressing. but very good. better then the average poem on this site. haha.
favorite line:
Maybe it'll snow again tonight
simply an awesome line. good poem and thank you for entering
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This is amazing and exactly what I asked for. This shows effort. It is vert depressing and shows what missing a person from loneliness does to you. Great job on this. You are the first person whos entered this. If you entered my last contest you probably would have won. This is great.
^.^.^.^
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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I just noticed something.
Everything you write is depressing.
You're some lucky that's just the type of thing I'm into, haha, so yeah, you got a fan.
-Kevan
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Ahhhhh, just what I needed.
some really sad stuff.
Good job and
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Wow really depressing, I think it's great.
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oh wow...thta's really, really good, i like it....
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