Do you hate me

This day you told me you hated me

The other day you said you loved me

Which is it do you love me or hate me

I need to know so I can move on or stay

I love you forever even if you hate me

I don't want to be in your way so i need

To know do you love me cause I will

Always love you forever and ever

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  • Token Massacre silver member
    January 13, 2007

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    there are a couple of repetitive lines.
    "Which is it do you love me or hate me" with "I love you forever even if you hate me"

    and "I need to know so I can move on or stay" with "I don't want to be in your way so i need"

    losing one of each of those lines (not both) would improve the flow.
    Good work though. Thanks for sharing this


  • Mai4ever
    January 13, 2007
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    This is a cute little poem. I liked it a lot. I think like what I said before, you're writing is improving a lot. This would make a great collection along with your other poems. Just like what WolfWalker said, keep them coming!


  • strawberry26
    January 12, 2007
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    great job i liked it keep up the good work