Cottage Life
Entry # 01 - The Old Cottage History /Part # 01/
By : James Bauman
© January 12, 2007
> The days have long past since the cottages of old were present upon the bay in the southern Bruce hamlet of Inverhuron. They were proud structures, with owners which were more proud than their hand crafted structures of Kincardine ancient wood or Wiarton quarry stone.
> They were set up in the 1910's to 1920's, day by day, their owners toiling in the unbearably intense heat. They were built by sweat, love and dreams. They were built upon a area which was
almost abandoned by the generations prior, but their dedication was incessant. When they were completed, their owners basked in presence of their own creations and the sight of a great body
of body that was seemingly endless.
> The water then was tremendously high and would lash it's fury upon the front's of cottages. The owners would have good year if they were not forced to remove water from the basements or
repair the fronts of their cottages. The water was a double-edged sword, beautiful yet was able to and has dragged many a to his watery grave just beyond the sandbanks. It was endless, the
water was a mysterious thing that was not explored beyond the turning of the water green.
> The water was the start of many adventures and expeditions by the children who lived their or visited during their summer vacation. They women were all in one piece bathing suits and the
men in swimming trunks. There were many days when the water was serene and perfect for a swim at any hour of the day. The children frolicked and played with one another day after day
while the parents basked in the wondrous and bright sun, speaking of business and life in the village, save for the occasional day of rain.
> The days were bight and full of life the small wooded lane of Lake street was the main road for the cottages which were to the south of the Inverhuron beach. The main attraction beside
the lake o course. There was never a shortage of get togethers or parties held by the owners of the old cottages. There were fires and barbeques on the beach. The cottage goers were all
friends. There was next to no ill will. The community was a place of togetherness and great friendship.
> The community was not a place away from the rest of the province but it held an air of seclusion that was almost unheard of in the modern cottage country. Although it was to the south
Georgian bay it was a small cottage country of it's own. The residents of the village did not vary any large amount from year to year. They were the same old folks, mostly Scots and
Brits coming to the area as second, third, fourth or even fifth generation Canadians.
Please tell me what you think
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if you were to take advice of this story being "blah", how would you change your following stories to be like? i'm curious. you shouldn't fill the whole thing with nonsense-exciting things - all you need is action and a plot and shockers. what you have here should be more of a layout of the setting of the story. when you're actually starting the story, you should put in those setting's descriptions in-between the events happening. or just keep them in your head so the reader could figure them out through hints and such.
when you introduce something, such as the water, and you repeat its name "the water" every new line - that is what a reader gets bored with. start by finding alternative names for "the water" to introduce newer aspects that it might hold as interesting importance for the story as it moves along.
i like that you're only a 14-year-old boy and bothered to start writing something though. i've never seen that in my life. respect.


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Good Start
This is a good start, but I have absolutely no idea of where you are going to go with it. You might have introduced this information while simultaneously introducing some characters exchanging dialogue which would have made it more interesting and less dry. Anyway, you have given me some ideas about how I may write my next story. I may employ some of my own advice. Got here by accident, but I hope this suggestion is helpful.
Andy
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And you think you can write
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Well, I didn't hate this, but I didn't love it either. Sorry for the honesty but if you want to lock your reader into this, I think you might have to stir up a little more excitement. But hey, if this is your style have fun with it... Even if it isn't really any fun. Sorry.
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sugar hunnie
um its....bornig sorry the blah of the 1960 make it more exiting plz sugar
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