My head is here
I am focused
I'm ready to play
I have confidence
I'm halfway there
I'm almost done
just one more time
and then I'm done
My last question
My last answer
and now I say
This test is over
But wait there's more
an essay question
A paragraph left
and THEN it's over
Now to wait
For the big grade
Will it be an F a C or an A?
Here it comes the big grade
what could it be
in what ways?
I got it
I got it
I got an A!
Now the pressure is off
for the rest of the day
I hope you enjoyed this
and next time you see
Worry means problems
and problems mean worry
Now be smart
and stay focused
That's all you must do
For I say...
Goodnight to all you.
A contest entry
- Nearly Anything.... by Natalie-.
275 points, ended April 20, 2008, 11 entries
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That was interesting and different, usually all poems are about love. Nice to read something different.
plot: 5.
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that was really good! I hate tests. Especially math (grumbles) and I also hate all that anticipation for your grade, like, you think you did really well and then you flunk? It sucks. That's happened to me numorous times.
I loved the little rythmic beat you had going on there, very smooth. I hop to read more from you in the future! -
That was interesting... Different from the rest. Good job!
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That was really good! I too hate taking tests. My favorite line was:
"Worry means problems and problems mean worry"
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Cool poem. I hate taking tests, they make me itch. I know weird, but true. I loved this though. Great job.
~Phoenixflower
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Yes, I think you've found the way to succeed! Nice write you've got there. I liked how you ran the lines together
'Worry means problems
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worry means problems and problems mean worry. I like that line, speaks true. this was good
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ohhhkaaay.....
that was kinda creepily-strange.... -
Oh if only I could get an A in economics...nice poem. I liked it a lot.
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Nice write! Very confident and holds great advice for us all...like this:
"Now be smart
and stay focused
That's all you must do"
Great piece!
Shady Lane -
mackenna34
this is sooo good! this rocks, britt!
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THANKS!:)
Hey, I didn't know u were on. Anyways, did you get my comment? Start writing longer, make it more detailed. Tell people what they need to improve on. Then write a very long comment. This gets you 8 points (for me both times.) Anways, thanx for the great comment.
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Interesting take on a taking a test. I liked the way you worked focus in there. Not bad. Keep it up.
~*Brooke*~ -
GREAT!
cool poem!
This is an awesome poem. I think it is the best you have ever written. ( At least that you have shown me.)
Your BFF,
alohanewmexico13 (AKA: Cari) -
BrittANY IT IS PRETTY GOOD I ACTUALLY LOVE IT BUT IT KIND OF SOUNDS LIKE THE MORAL OF MY STORY
beginning: 3, language: 2, plot: 3, ending: 5, dialog: 1, characters: 1.
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Aaaahhhhh!!!!! this is the BEST poem I've ever heard you write!!!!! It makes PERFECT sense. You are a NATURAL!!!
If you're reading this and you're not aloha dolphin lover, then just to let you know-I'm not crazy, I'm just her friend from school. And I am NOT lying....this is the best poem she's EVER written.
Your big fan, and best friend,
Helloworld13
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Excellent +
This is a very good poem. The structure is strong and the way that you pose questionsn throughout is amazing, I could never do that. Keep up the good work. Captures the moment very well. No complaints. -
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THANKS
Thank you for keeping your head here long enough for readin this story.
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